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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:37, 27 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Will read this article and give comments soon. MWright96 (talk) 13:37, 27 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

General

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  • SunRisers should be refered to as "The SunRisers" wvery time they are mentioned and do the same with the other teams mentioned in the article

Background

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  • "Chennai Super Kings and Rajasthan Royals were re-included in the 2018 season" - The Chennai Super Kings and the Rajasthan Royals
  • "The IPL Governing Council also announced that a maximum of five players can be retained by each IPL team of which a maximum of three can be selected through retention in the lead up to the auction," - of which no more than three can be selected through retention
  • "and a maximum of three through right-to-match cards during the auction." - the acroynms of right-to-match should be placed in this section of text rather than in the retenting sub-section

" "The other restrictions on player retention were: a maximum of three capped Indian players can be retained, and only two overseas and two uncapped Indian players can be retained." - kept to avoid reptition

Retention

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  • "They went into 2018 IPL auction" - missing "the" between "into" and "2018"

Player auction

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  • "They went all guns for getting Manish Pandey - "all guns" is informal and unencyclopedic
  • "They later added Carlos Brathwaite and Yusuf Pathan from capped all-rounders list" - missing "the" between "from" and "capped"
  • "They really came to life during the auction" - "came to life" is not appropriate for Wikipedia
  • "and also getting services" - add the word "the" that should be inbetween "getting" and "services"

Offseason

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  • "On 28 March, David Warner resigned as the captain of SunRisers Hyderabad in the aftermath of ball-tampering scandal" - of a ball-tampering scandal
  • "The BCCI later announced on the same day" - spell out BCCI since its not mentioned later in the article
  • "following one-year ban imposed on them by Cricket Australia." - this should read as after Cricket Australia imposed a one-year ban on them.
  • "On the following day, SunRisers Hyderabad announced Kane Williamson as captain and Bhuvneshwar Kumar as vice-captain for the season." - rewrite to The following day, SunRisers Hyderabad announced Kane Williams would serve as captain]] and Bhuvneshwar Kumar would be vice-season for the season.
  • "Later, they announced Alex Hales as replacement for Warner for the season." - changed this to Later, the announced Alex Hales as Warner's replacement for the season.
  • "On the squad available for this season, coach Tom Moody said" - a comma is needed at the end of this sentence

April

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  • "Williamson, the new captain of SunRisers, elected to field first after winning toss" - reword to Williamson, the SunRisers' new captain, elected to field first after winning the toss
  • "with Williamson providing stable stand on the other end" - providing a stable stand
  • "Sandeep Sharma was handed debut for SunRisers, replacing the injured Bhuvneshwar, and started troubling Mumbai Indians batsmen" - Sandeep Sharma was handed his debut for the SunRisers, replacing the injured Bhuyneshwar, and started troubling the Mumbai Indians batsmen
  • "but it was Stanlake who drew the first blood, dismissing Rohit Sharma. " - but it was Stanlake who succeeded in dismissing Rohit Sharma
  • "On 14 April, SunRisers completed a hat-trick of wins in the season with a five-wicket win over Kolkata Knight Riders." - The SunRisers completed a hat-trick of wins in the season with a five-wicket victory over the Kolkata Knight Riders on 14 April.
  • "Saha provided an explosive start" - change "explosive start" to something more formal
  • "Later, Gayle broke shackles" - Later, Gayle stopped his limits
  • "losing their openers but local boy, Ambati Rayudu, used his familiarity of the ground to beat conditions" - losing their openers but local player, Ambati Rayudu, used his familiarity of the ground to beat the conditions
  • "Pandey reached 'his 50 while building another crucial partnership with" - his 50 what exactly?

May

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  • "On 7 May, SunRisers equaled their best streak of five consecutive wins defeating Royal Challengers Bangalore at home by 5 runs. " - by defeating
  • "Royal Challengers came back strongly at the death" - not encyclopedic wording
  • "Royal Challengers started the chase strongly with cameo from Parthiv Patel" - with a cameo from Parthiv Patel and link Cameo to Glossary of cricket terms#C
  • "and become first team to qualify for the playoffs." - {{xt|became the first team to qualify for the playoffs.}
  • "Though Sunrisers lost Hales early," - SunRisers

Playoffs

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  • "However, a late innings blitz" - attack

References

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  • Would be too long to list every one, but make sure that the author(s) are included in all the sources that include them
  • Reference 2 needs the newspaper that published it, the date it was published and the date you accessed it
  • References 18 and 19 are missing the websites that published them
  • For the Twitter references (References 12, 14 and 15), see Template:Cite tweet on how they should be formatted
  • Ensure the IPL reference do not all have capitalized wording in their sources
  • The ESPNCricInfo sources need to be consistent in how they are presented; personally i'd go with ESPNCricInfo instead of a mixture of espncricinfo and espncricinfo.com

That is all I have found. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 18:51, 27 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]