Talk:Sîn-šumu-līšir/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 05:53, 15 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 05:53, 15 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.a Y

1.b Y
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2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y
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3.a Y

3.b Y
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4.a Y
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5.a Y
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6.a Y

6.b Y

No DAB links Y
No dead links Y
No missing citations Y

Discussion

Prose Suggestions

Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Biography

He was a eunuch and probably a prominent courtier already during the reign of Ashurbanipal (r. 669–631 BC). suggest He was a eunuch and probably already a prominent courtier during the reign of Ashurbanipal (r. 669–631 BC).
Apparently, an official by the name Nabu-rihtu-usur attempted to usurp the Assyrian throne with the help of another official called Sin-shar-ibni. suggest An official named Nabu-rihtu-usur attempted to seize the Assyrian throne with the help of another official called Sin-shar-ibni.
As the king's rab ša rēši, it is likely that Sin-shumu-lishir helped Ashur-etil-ilani to stop the would-be usurpers and their conspiracy appears to have been crushed relatively quickly. suggest As the king's rab ša rēši, it is likely that Sin-shumu-lishir played a role in suppressing the conspiracy, which appears to have been crushed relatively quickly.
Sin-shumu-lishir is also recorded as having been rewarded land by Ashur-etil-ilani, possibly as a reward for his aid to the king. suggest Sin-shumu-lishir is also recorded as receiving land from Ashur-etil-ilani, possibly as a rewards for his service to the king.
containing the image of a beardless king (Assyrian kings were always depicted with beards but eunuchs were always depicted beardless) could depict Sin-shumu-lishir. suggest containing the image of a beardless king could depict Sin-shumu-lishir, as Assyrian kings were always depicted with beards but eunuchs were always depicted beardless.
@Ichthyovenator: that is all my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 12:04, 15 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Iazyges: Thanks! Implemented all your suggestions as before. Ichthyovenator (talk) 14:47, 15 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]