Talk:Serpens/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Parcly Taxel (talk · contribs) 01:45, 17 August 2014 (UTC)

Someone (@StringTheory11:), seeing my (now successful) nomination of fluorine and my multiple GA reviews, asked me to come over here and review this constellation. Now that the FAC is done and passed, let's get here. Parcly Taxel 01:45, 17 August 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

1a

Bold text in the quotations indicates errors that need to be replaced with the italic text.
Lead

• "Part of the Milky Way passes through Serpens Cauda, which is thus therefore rich in deep-sky objects, such as the Eagle Nebula (IC 4703) and its associated star cluster Messier 16."

History

• "In some ancient atlases, the constellations Serpens and Ophiuchus were depicted as two separate constellations, although in most they were shown as a single constellation. Back in this time, there were no official constellation boundaries, so when depicted separately, their bodies were not intertwined with each other."
• "in In Chinese astronomy, most of the stars of Serpens represented part of a wall surrounding a marketplace, known as Tianshi, which was in Ophiuchus and part of Hercules."
• "It appears that Mušḫuššu was depicted as a hybrid of a dragon, a lion and a bird, and loosely corresponds corresponded to Hydra."

Notable features
Head stars

• "The brightest star in Serpens, Alpha Serpentis, also known as Unukalhai or Unukalhai, is a red giant of spectral type K2III located approximately 22.68 parsecs (74.0 ly) away which marks the snake's heart."
• "Located near Alpha is Lambda Serpentis, a magnitude 4.42 star rather similar to the Sun located relatively close to Earth at only 12.12 parsecs (39.5 ly) distant away."
• "The Mira variable R Serpentis, located between Beta and Gamma, is visible to the naked eye at its maximum brightness of 5.16, but, typical of Mira variables, it can fade to below magnitude 14."
• "The primary, an a white subgiant, is a Delta Scuti variable with an average apparent magnitude of 4.23."

Tail stars

• "The eclipses of the system are very erratic, and although there are two proposed theories as to why, neither of them is completely consistent with today's current understanding of stars."
  • All  Done. StringTheory11 (t • c) 17:35, 18 August 2014 (UTC)

2b

• "Since Serpens is regarded as one constellation despite being split into two halves, the ordering of Bayer and Flamsteed designations go roughly in order of brightness among both halves (i.e. there is only one Alpha, one Beta, etc. in the entire constellation). Only one star in Serpens is brighter than third magnitude, so the constellation is not easy to perceive." (Stars)
  • You know, I'll just remove this bit. The first part about Bayer designations going in order of decreasing brightness isn't quite accurate, since right ascension is also involved, and it would be next to impossible to actually find a source that says this specifically for Serpens (even though it's common sense). As for the second part, a one-sentence section does more harm to the flow of the article than the reader can gain from that sentence, which doesn't say anything too important. StringTheory11 (t • c) 17:35, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
• "USS Serpens (AK-97) was a United States Navy Crater class cargo ship named after the constellation." (Namesakes) This claim doesn't look like it is relevant, let alone belongs, to the article; maybe it could be removed? Parcly Taxel 10:13, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
  • Section removed. StringTheory11 (t • c) 17:35, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
    • Passed. Parcly Taxel 00:54, 19 August 2014 (UTC)