Talk:SMS Kaiser Friedrich III/GA1
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Reviewer: White Shadows I ran away from you 20:05, 12 July 2010 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- Prose is fine but there are a few issues in the Collision section. There seems to be an issue over the placement of the sentences, they seem out of order. One example is Two men were seriously injured while fighting the fire, and a third died of his injuries, shouldn't that be a few sentences back in the text? There are other examples like this one all throughout this section. According to Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), when doing conversions, you should use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb (I got this last one from the automated tips in a PR section, if you think otherwise then just tell me, this is not a deal breaker or anything, just a bit of advice)--White Shadows I ran away from you 23:58, 12 July 2010 (UTC)
- I moved a couple of sentences around; how does that look now? As for conversions, I'm not really sure what you're talking about. Can you point anything out? Parsecboy (talk) 00:37, 13 July 2010 (UTC)
- Same as below : )--White Shadows I ran away from you 01:14, 13 July 2010 (UTC)
- I moved a couple of sentences around; how does that look now? As for conversions, I'm not really sure what you're talking about. Can you point anything out? Parsecboy (talk) 00:37, 13 July 2010 (UTC)
- There are also a few redundancies in the article; can you fix that as well?--White Shadows I ran away from you 23:59, 12 July 2010 (UTC)
- I don't know what you mean here either. Can you identify them so I can fix them? Parsecboy (talk) 00:37, 13 July 2010 (UTC)
- Examples like this may or may not exist in the text, (I got it from the PR suggestions page) I personally do not see any glaring issues so I'll pass this section of the criteria. If you plan on taking this to ACR or FAC, then someone else may find an issue but I don't see anything that is a red flag according to the GAC.--White Shadows I ran away from you 01:14, 13 July 2010 (UTC)
- I don't know what you mean here either. Can you identify them so I can fix them? Parsecboy (talk) 00:37, 13 July 2010 (UTC)
- Prose is fine but there are a few issues in the Collision section. There seems to be an issue over the placement of the sentences, they seem out of order. One example is Two men were seriously injured while fighting the fire, and a third died of his injuries, shouldn't that be a few sentences back in the text? There are other examples like this one all throughout this section. According to Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), when doing conversions, you should use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb (I got this last one from the automated tips in a PR section, if you think otherwise then just tell me, this is not a deal breaker or anything, just a bit of advice)--White Shadows I ran away from you 23:58, 12 July 2010 (UTC)
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- Is there any way that you can add in an online source somewhere in the text? You don't have to if you cannot find anything but some external link would be nice. On another note, maybe you should add citations into the infobox like I do (German submarine U-30 (1936) or German Type IXA submarine for example, just another suggestion).--White Shadows I ran away from you 23:58, 12 July 2010 (UTC)
- I generally avoid websites with the exception of navweaps. Most everything you find online isn't reliable, and it's not worth the time sorting through them to find one that might be. As for citations in the infobox, I added one to the notes section. Parsecboy (talk) 00:37, 13 July 2010 (UTC)
- I agree with the internet reliability thing with the exception of a few sites (like navweaps). Thanks for adding that citation in. I have no more issues here.--White Shadows I ran away from you 01:06, 13 July 2010 (UTC)
- I generally avoid websites with the exception of navweaps. Most everything you find online isn't reliable, and it's not worth the time sorting through them to find one that might be. As for citations in the infobox, I added one to the notes section. Parsecboy (talk) 00:37, 13 July 2010 (UTC)
- Is there any way that you can add in an online source somewhere in the text? You don't have to if you cannot find anything but some external link would be nice. On another note, maybe you should add citations into the infobox like I do (German submarine U-30 (1936) or German Type IXA submarine for example, just another suggestion).--White Shadows I ran away from you 23:58, 12 July 2010 (UTC)
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- Coverage is fine.--White Shadows I ran away from you 23:49, 12 July 2010 (UTC)
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- No issues here.--White Shadows I ran away from you 23:47, 12 July 2010 (UTC)
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- Considering that you are (almost) the only one who edits it, this is not an issue.--White Shadows I ran away from you 23:48, 12 July 2010 (UTC)
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- The only image is fine.--White Shadows I ran away from you 00:06, 13 July 2010 (UTC)
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass:
- Pass:
- I'll be looking over this article in a minute and assess everything for a GA Parsec. Knowing your credentials, I doubt that there will be much to change :)--White Shadows I ran away from you 20:05, 12 July 2010 (UTC)
- Good job writing this article, I'm passing it :)--White Shadows I ran away from you 01:14, 13 July 2010 (UTC)