Talk:Richard Nixon 1968 presidential campaign/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 00:04, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

A well-written, detailed, informative piece on his campaign. Just fix the problems below, and you'll be good to go! -- King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 01:45, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

In "Background," his "reputation as an ardent anti-Communist" is unsupported by sources. -- King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 00:16, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Y OK King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 03:38, 30 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
In "Background," "renowned for his diplomatic skills" is a weasely statement that should either be cited or removed. -- King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 00:16, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Y OK King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 03:38, 30 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
In "General election," it is not clear what "highest ranking African American in the nation" means. -- King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 01:38, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Usually, the title or a group of words related to the title are bolded at the beginning of an article. Can you figure out a way to do that? -- King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 00:13, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Y OK King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 03:38, 30 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The lead is a little wordy, e.g. "gained enough delegate strength to be victorious." Also, "law and order was a major theme of the Nixon campaign" sounds a bit awkward due to the "to-be" verb "was." (I won't be as picky for the main prose of the passage, promise!) -- King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 00:13, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Y OK King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 03:38, 30 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Try to reduce the amount of passive voice in the article. -- King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 00:22, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
In "General election," is there a better way to word "who relayed to Nixon, Johnson's frustration"? -- King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 01:39, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
In "Aftermath," in my browser File:Richard Nixon 1969 inauguration.png protrudes down into the "References" section, causing display problems with it. Could you consider removing the image? -- King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 01:42, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]