Talk:OMG (Usher song)/GA1

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Reviewer: I am the reviewer--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 19:18, 13 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I am starting the review.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 05:39, 25 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Why is the writer William Adams and the producer Will.i.am. Should be consistent.

As seen in the FA 4 Minutes (Madonna song), in the first infobox mentioning the proper name is first mentioned, followed by their stage name in the second. Candy o32 21:46, 9 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You shouldn't copy everything there word for word. While it might be FA, there still are errors. For starters, why is Danja different but not Timbaland? Thats an inconsistency.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 02:13, 10 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

FA's are supposed to set precedent for other articles, as well as almost every singles GA. I know this is sort of WP:OTHERSTUFF, but when so high quality music articles, (particularly the FA's) it would seem to be something of silent consensus. I assume Timbaland is not because he is included as a featured artist on the song. But the reasoning is much deeper than the surface. While Timbaland may be credited as a writer as "Timbaland," Danja is credited as Nathaniel Hills, as will.i.am. is credited as William Adams. I don't see such as big deal, and almost all HQ music articles on Wikipedia use the proper name writer then common name performer in the writer/producer paramaters such as Poker Face (Lady Gaga song), Tik Tok (song), 3 Words (song), 3 (song), Right Round, Feedback (song), Louboutins, and many many more. Candy o32 13:58, 11 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

and the third single overall, following the three US singles "Papers," "Hey Daddy (Daddy's Home)," and "Lil Freak." -> wouldn't that make it the fourth?

Done

making him the first 2010s artist to collect number-one singles in three consecutive decades, and only the fourth artist of all-time to achieve the feat -> confusing

Done, took out latter part.

critically acclaimed? -> I don't see that referenced in the body.

It was referenced in the body, but now I have added a sentence to start of the reviews in the body.

The song's choreography and dance-heavy accompanying music video has been compared to that of "Yeah!". -> by who? fans, critics?

Done

Usher performed the song live several times, including with will.i.am -> re-write

Done Candy o32 00:22, 10 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Composition

while arranging R&B, hip-hop elements -> R&B and hip-hop

Done

all lines feature the auto-tune effect -> you said in the lead several. Needs consistency

Done Candy o32 00:24, 10 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

The critics don't say these things. They write them.

Eh, well articles of featured status like 4 Minutes (Madonna song), Déjà Vu (Beyoncé Knowles song), and others all use a variation of terms such as believed, praised, described, compared, and/or said. Candy o32 21:49, 9 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Again, praised and described are fine, but I have a problem with say. The others are fine.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 02:12, 10 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The dictionary definition of say is to "express in words." Saying that someone "said" something does not mean it literally came out of their mouth, it can also mean the wrote, it typed it, etc. Candy o32 14:32, 11 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Chart performance

number fourteen on in the Billboard Hot 100 -> typo

Done

the song lifted -> better word; summited, peaked etc.

I think lifted may be the better word as it as not a big jump as "summited" would imply, but rather a meager move.

where does it say anything about honors?

The section talks about countries where it was certified.

tied with the Bee Gees, Elton John, and Paul McCartney for the ninth among artists all time with the most Hot 100 hits -> ninth place etc.

I took out - ~~the~~ ninth among all artist. If "ninth place" makes it seem like this was a race or something.

"OMG" reached number two in Canada, and was certified Platinum by the -> chart box says 2xP. Which one is right?

2P is right

Done

It was certified 2x Platinum by the Australian Recording Industry Association -> chart box says 4. Which one?

4P is right

Done

Music video

Usher and will.i.am shot the video the weekend of March 6, 2010, and the video was directed by Anthony Mandler. -> re-write

Done

Live performances

and Good Morning America

Done

Fix all the also that begin many sentences.

Done

All In All: Good work, not much too fix.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 06:10, 25 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Been two weeks and the issues haven't been fixed. Should this be failed? Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:12, 9 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It is up to the reviewer to decide the alloted time for the review. I am still patient, so you will have to be as well.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 18:33, 9 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Its fine, those things are debatable. I'm passing.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 17:51, 11 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]