Talk:Nueces Bay/GA1

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Reviewer: Sasata (talk) 05:10, 26 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'm enjoying learning about Texan bodies of water, so have signed up for another review. Comments in a day or two. Sasata (talk) 05:10, 26 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I made several copyedits and added links, please review to make sure I didn't mess anything up. Other comments:
lead looks pretty thin

~~::Will expand in the morning.--William S. Saturn (talk) 06:17, 27 July 2010 (UTC)~~[reply]

Expanded and rewritten.--William S. Saturn (talk) 17:47, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"and serves as an instrument for the propagation of fish and shellfish." calling the bay "an instrument" is an idiomatic expression that doesn't quite seem to work here

Rephrased.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"Industry and the production of oil are equally important to the surrounding economies of the major settlements of Corpus Christi and Portland." Equally important as what? This is the first sentence of a new paragraph, so there's nothing to compare to.

Rephrased.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

was Joaquín de Orobio y Basterra a Spanish explorer?

Added that he was a Spanish captain.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"The Spanish planned a villa on the mouth of the Nueces River," who planned it? When?

Added more information.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

any explanation for the name "The Motts"?

Added explanation.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"After being rejected by the railroad in 1905" "Being rejected" might need to be spelled out a little more explicitly for the reader unaware of the Railroad and its effects on smaller communities in early 20th century America

Clarified.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"To the north of the bay, the Coleman-Fulton Pasture Company controlled a large segment of San Patricio County for ranching purposes at the end of the Texas Revolution." little unclear: did they only control the area at the end of the Revolution, or did they do ranching at the end of the Revolution? Also, the phrase "ranching purposes" is awkward.

Clarified.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

What are the names of the nearby towns named after Sinton and Taft?

Added.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not sure if "bloc" is an intentional spelling

Fixed.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"… after White Point and Rachal were rejected." by the Railway?

Clarified.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Is there no map view of the bay & surrounding area that could be used?

~~Working on it.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)~~[reply]

Added.--William S. Saturn (talk) 06:15, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"In the early 1970s, recreational fishing accounted for a yearly total of $17 million at the site, while commercial fishermen produced $27.3 million." What do these #'s mean? 17 million $ worth of fish was caught? Sale of fishing gear and licenses was 17 mil?

Clarified.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"closed the practice" sounds like they shut down a medical centre or something… how about "outlawed" or "stopped"

Reworded.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"…which affects the composition of filter feeders such as oysters." "affects the composition" sounds like a polite way to say it contaminates the oysters, rendering them unhealthy for human consumption.

Rephrased.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"Since that time, zinc levels in the bay have been reduced." Any hards #'s that could be used here?

Added numbers.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

20,000 gallons -> convert to litters; same with five miles, 100,000 gallons and 12-mile Done
What is the deepest point of the bay? How about the total volume of water?

Could not find deepest point, but did find average depth and the total volume.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

shouldn't the article mention somewhere the Total Maximum Daily Load project?

Added.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

any info on the Bay's geological history?

Added.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

What is the Bay's area? (the "Project Overview" link in the TMDL project link above has this info; this document also mentions the bay plays a role in "storm protection"-any more info about that?)

Added. I believe storm protection refers to its drainage, which has now been noted.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

anything interesting from this paper that could be used? How about this one?

I cannot access those papers.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

this paper suggests that pesticide run-off into the bay from surrounding crop lands is another environmental problem

Added.--William S. Saturn (talk) 00:23, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the review, I have responded to all concerns.--William S. Saturn (talk) 17:48, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks great, thanks for all the improvements. Am promoting the article now. Cheers, Sasata (talk) 03:35, 29 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]