Talk:Nobody Knows Me/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 15:36, 6 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Info box

I'm pretty sure that remix covers for clubs do not count as artwork.

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Use the time duration and date templates, like on "S&M (song)" for example

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Dance should be before electronic, as D is before E

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Remove the A-side and B-side parameters. There aren't any so a bit pointless having them there.

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Lead

It was released as a club single in the United States → I don't think labels release songs as "club singles" with the intention of it only being played in clubs. The info box says promotional single, so I think this is what you should go with.

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"Nobody Knows Me" carries on the main theme of American Life → Does it? This needs a bit more explanation.

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with its concept of "nothing", and is an electronic and dance song, with vocoder effects, spacey synths and a bubbly bass. Lyrically, Madonna rejects tabloid culture's "social disease", denouncing both TV and magazines. → Full stop after "nothing". Join the last bit about genres with the lyrics into one sentence. At the moment, this isn't making sense to me.

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who called it as a highlight from American Life → many of whom called it

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on the Hot Dance Club Play chart of Billboard. → on the US Hot Dance Club Play chart.
topped the Hot Dance Singles Sales → topped the US Hot Dance Singles Sales chart

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and also charted on the Australia Club Chart → and peaked at number 49 on the Australian Singles Chart. (I can't find anything on here about an AUS Club CHart and I've never heard of it)
Madonna did a solo performance of the song on her Re-Invention World Tour in 2004. → What do you mean solo performance??

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More to come...

Calvin, finish off the review, then I will start addressing them. —Indian:BIO · ^{[ ChitChat ]} 09:16, 22 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I corrected some of them. Jorn ^talk 16:20, 22 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

You need to provide me with a source for the AUS Club Chart. — AARON • ^TALK 11:38, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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Recording and composition

at West Hollywood → in West Hollywood

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The second and third paragraph can be one.

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The source for electronic and dance says "electro-based/dance-oriented". Based and oriented do not make them of the genre, so they need to be removed.

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Remove "According to the sheet music published at Sheetmusicplus.com, "

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Critical reception

This is just full of really short quote sentences. There is no flow between them at all.

Done Better now?

References

MTV publisher is Viacom

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Status

On hold — AARON • ^TALK 11:46, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Passing — AARON • ^TALK 09:09, 1 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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