Talk:Marvel vs. Capcom Origins/GA1
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:43, 31 January 2016 (UTC)
I think I'll finish this tomorrow. JAGUAR 20:43, 31 January 2016 (UTC)
- Sorry for the wait, I'll definitely finish this tomorrow. JAGUAR 23:02, 1 February 2016 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]Once again, I'd recommend unlinking video game in the lead due to potential overlinkage- "The dual pack was released through the PlayStation Network and Xbox Live Arcade in September and October 2012." - The dual pack was released through the PlayStation Network and Xbox Live Arcade in September and October 2012, respectively.
- "Origins was released to mixed and positive reviews" - how about The game was met with mixed to positive reviews upon release?
- "but criticized it for its clunky, outdated gameplay and unbalanced rosters" - I'd remove 'clunky', makes it sound a bit choppy here
- I would recommend splitting the Gameplay section into two paragraphs, to improve prose flow
- "which had also included online play using GGPO" - unlink GGPO here, it is already linked in gameplay
Once more, I think it would be best to split the reception section into two paragraphs, with a new one starting at "Taylor Cocke of IGN rated the title 8.2/10..."- No dead refs, and they all meet WP:VG/RS
Nice work on this article, overall it's well written and comprehensive for an online-only game. Sorry for the delay too, I usually review GANs within 24 hours. Once all of the minor issues are out of the way then this can pass. JAGUAR 16:06, 3 February 2016 (UTC)
- Done. Thank you once again for your time! Wani (talk) 17:42, 3 February 2016 (UTC)