Talk:Liberté-class battleship/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 21:43, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, I'll review this to add to my collection! MathewTownsend (talk) 21:43, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hi,

I've made the following edits which you're free to change.[1]

"was a group of four pre-dreadnought battleships of the French Navy. The class comprised Liberté, the lead ship, Justice, Vérité, and Démocratie." - not readily clear why only three visited the US.
- None of the sources say why, so I'd prefer not to speculate.

"Two years later, Liberté's forward magazines exploded in Toulon harbor, destroying the ship and killing approximately 250 of her crew." -why does the body of the article continue after the "The explosion aboard Liberté killed some 250 officers and men.[8] The wreck was left in Toulon until 1925, when it was raised and broken up for scrap."?
- I don't know that I follow. Are you asking why Liberte's ultimate fate isn't in the lead?

"after the revolutionary British HMS Dreadnought," - after the revolutionary design of the British HMS Dreadnought?
- I don't think there's a problem with calling the ship revolutionary versus its design - isn't the design part implied in the first? The sentence is already fairly wordy, and I don't really want to make it longer.

"with good success" - with success? used successfully in the Navy's experiments ..
- Good point. Thanks for reviewing the article, Mathew. Parsecboy (talk) 22:20, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review-see WP:WIAGA for criteria (and here for what they are not)

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b. complies with MoS for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, summary style and list incorporation:
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b. provides in-line citations from reliable sources where necessary:

c. no original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic:

b. it remains focused and does not go into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
Does it follow the neutral point of view policy.
fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
no edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
a. images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

b. images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
Pass!