Talk:Lhasa (city)/GA1

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:54, 12 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Very comprehensive. I should have this to you tomorrow JAGUAR 19:54, 12 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

"formerly Lhasa Prefecture, is a prefecture-level city, one of the main administrative divisions" - missing "and"?

Well it's saying that the prefecture-level city is one of the main divisions so I think it's OK.

"The Han Chinese population was mainly concentrated in urban areas" - still as of the 2000 census?

at the time..

"Chengguan District is also the center of Tibet in terms of transport, communications, education and religion, the most developed part of Tibet and a major tourist destination with sights such as the Potala Palace" - the sentence here is a bit choppy. It might sound better as Chengguan District is also the center of Tibet in terms of transport, communications, education and religion, as well as being the most developed part of Tibet and a major tourist destination with sights such as the Potala Palace...

Done.

"Contact with India began along" - might be worth changing this to the Indian continent

Continent? It's a country bordering Tibet!

I meant when it was a separate continent millions of years ago, sorry I should've been clearer! JAGUAR 21:40, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"The Lhasa valley is roughly the same latitude as the southern US" - should read as full "United States"

Done.

"Products include braziers, flower pots, vases, jugs and so on" - and vice versa?

just changed it to and jugs.

" China National Highway 318 runs through Qüxü County from Lhasa" - China National Highway 318 is already linked above in this section

Delinked.

~~"said to have been founded in 1055 by Dromtön, a pupil of Atiśa" - "student"? I can't check this source to see what it says as it's in Chinese~~ nevermind, the source says "pupil"!
"Perhaps 250,000 people live in the city and in towns" approximately

Done

"The first drug rehabilitation center in Tibet was being constructed in Duilongdeqing County in 2009. It would provide physiological rehabilitation, psychological therapy" - I think this is in the wrong tense

Added "was planned"

References

Historical Dra Yerpa temple in Tibet is dead
Research on the rational use of water resources on the Lhasa River, Tibet is dead
"The Tibetan Plateau: Regional Stratigraphic Context and Previous Work" ref has a harvref error - needs correcting

Aymatth2 Can you fix?♦ Dr. Blofeld 20:58, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed. I found alternative sites holding the two deadlink documents, and removed the unused source "The Tibetan Plateau: Regional Stratigraphic Context and Previous Work" Aymatth2 (talk) 10:03, 15 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

On hold

This is a very well written and comprehensive article, even deserving of FA status. I hope I didn't miss anything vital out, but it took me an hour just to read through the prose (and I checked through most of the sources), but most of it is fine. Once all of the above are clarified then this should easily pass JAGUAR 15:34, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaguar: We're all good now I think, thanks for the review.♦ Dr. Blofeld 18:59, 15 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for addressing them! Very good article. Might be worth taking to FA one day

JAGUAR 19:02, 15 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]