Talk:Lady Bouvier's Lover/GA1

GA Review

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Plot: I think this section is a bit thin, could you add a bit about...

• What happens after Bart buys the animation gel? Otherwise, why does it warrant a mention here? (Doesn't he somehow get $350 out of Mr. Burns to pay Homer back?)

 Done

• Can you add at least a passing mention of Abe's attempts to woo Mrs. Bovuier during their night on the town?

 Not done Like..? :P

Well, I haven't seen the ep in a while so I don't remember any offhand. I figured there must have been at least one or two (like the Chaplin bread dance thing for example) but this isn't a big enough objection to hold up the review anyway... --Hunter Kahn (talk) 01:21, 3 March 2009 (UTC)

• How does she first meet Mr. Burns before falling for him? Can you toss that in?

 Done (I think it's better now)

Production:

• "Originally, the episode was supposed to be about misery, and Grampa would get injured on Mr. Burns's property and think that Mr. Burns was trying to kill him." Can you rephrase or expand this? It's not entirely clear to me.

 Done (I think it's better now)

• Is all this stuff about the actors killing time by playing table tennis and reading books really relevant? It seems like an unnecessary detail, which the GA criteria would say should go...

 Done

• "It was tough on Kavner's voice because those characters talk with gravelly voices." This needs to be attributed to somebody; otherwise, it's original research and POV, both of which are no-nos.

 Done

--Hunter Kahn (talk) 02:33, 1 March 2009 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! :) TheLeftorium 11:17, 1 March 2009 (UTC)

A good article is:

1. Well-written: Prose is fin, MOS is fine.
2. Factually accurate and verifiable: Sources are fine, no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage: Addresses main topics, no unneeded detail.
4. Neutral: Yes.
5. Stable: Yes.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by images: Yes.

Pass. --Hunter Kahn (talk) 01:21, 3 March 2009 (UTC)

Yay, thank you! :) TheLeftorium 14:30, 3 March 2009 (UTC)