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Reviewer: Piotrus (talk · contribs) 11:27, 3 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Very interesting and well written article. Few comments:

  • while I support WP:RED should Choe Chae-ryon be linked? Is she notable on her own?
  • "Pak's ally Yi Hyo-sun was charged of personally failing covert operations in South Korea" - this sentence is unclear, please rewrite. ("personally failing covert operations" doesn't make sense). If it relates to the next sentence, please make it more obvious.
  • Kim acquired permission from his loyal party members in a secret meeting to remove the Kapsan faction -> do we know the date of this meeting?
  • Pak Kum-chol was sent to work in a factory in the countryside and later executed -> do we know the date of his execution?
  • Even its name was omitted in propaganda until recently. -> can 'recently' be made more precise? Keep in mind in few decades this term will be of course incorrect
  • pausing for now, will finish reviewing soon


Thank you, Piotrus.
  •  Done: I've unlinked Choe Chae-ryon
  •  Doing... Will rephrase the sentence
    •  Done it.
  •  Doing... The source says March, but the warnings were also in March. I'll have to think about how to word this.
  • I'll have to check a few more sources at the library. Apparently, some sources give a date and also talk about a possible suicide.
    •  Done now.
  •  Doing... The source is a bit ambiguous on whether the actual name of the speech returned or just mentions of it. Anyway, this happened during Kim Jong-il's rule. I'll have to figure out how to phrase it.
    •  Done!
Cheers – Finnusertop (talkcontribs) 21:59, 3 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
You're welcome, Piotrus.
Yours – Finnusertop (talkcontribs) 15:00, 5 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Great, passing :) Through I'd suggest replacing the single Britannica ref with non-tertiary source. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 03:04, 6 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]