Talk:Justinus Darmojuwono/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 13:02, 15 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I am afraid I am going to have to quick-fail this article, as it is clearly not ready for good article status, as it fails criteria 2a and 2b; no reliable sources are cited. There are other problems:

The lead section does not adequately summarise the rest of the article; see WP:LEAD.
There is no evidence that the lead image is freely licensed, and it should be deleted.
A lot of the writing is very poor, and the tone is inappropriate in places. Just some examples:
- "Son of Surodikira and Ngatinah, his early life as an ordinary villager son was really happy and he really proud of it."
- "After he returned from Rome, he became a curate in Purbayan, Surakarta, and also serve as a Military Curate."
- "tragedy was happened on 1965".
I suspect that, for someone this prominent, there is going to be a lot more to be written. Did he ever publish any books or academic research, for instance?

I advise you search for some reliable sources to cite in the article and ensure that the material in the article is supported by those sources. Everything in the article must be verifiable, and you must avoid original research. Before future nominations at GAC, it may be worth looking for someone who can help with your writing; Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) is a very good writer who is interested in Indonesia-related topics, and so may be willing to help you. J Milburn (talk) 13:02, 15 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

(And, coincidentally, I wrote our FA on another Indonesian bishop). Agree completely with J Milburn's review. Lots of sources are available on Darmojuwono (I have one here, though not too in-depth), and we need proper referencing. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:46, 15 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]