Talk:John Y. Brown Jr./GA2
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The article meets all the good article criteria as-is, so I'm going to pass it. It's very clear and readable. I have a few minor comments which go beyond the GA criteria; you may address them or disregard them as you wish. —Designate (talk) 23:31, 19 December 2010 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- - I think it would be smoother to put the family members later in the lead. Reading the first paragraph was jarring for me, especially the "Currently single" which is off-tone for a biography. The first paragraph is usually the most basic summary of the subject's identity. Also, I don't like the phrase "although he may be best-known for...". It seems weaselly for the lead paragraph.
- There are a few odd terms that ought to be linked – "U.S. Congress", "wood-roasted chicken", "Mrs. Kentucky". Maybe "bachelor's degree" as that means different things in different countries.
- "old political foe" should probably be reworded, such as "former political foe".
- - I think it would be smoother to put the family members later in the lead. Reading the first paragraph was jarring for me, especially the "Currently single" which is off-tone for a biography. The first paragraph is usually the most basic summary of the subject's identity. Also, I don't like the phrase "although he may be best-known for...". It seems weaselly for the lead paragraph.
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- I think some of the footnoting is excessive (but others may disagree with me). The "In Kentucky's Governors" paragraph cites the same footnote four sentences in a row. It would help the article's clarity if some of the footnotes were condensed.
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No obvious problems, as you apparently wrote the whole article yourself.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- The image of Collins should use the "upright" option so it's not so big. It would be good to correct the rotation if possible.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Good work. Good luck on the GT.
Reviewer: Designate (talk) 23:31, 19 December 2010 (UTC)