Talk:John Albert Taylor/GA1
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Reviewer: Nikkimaria (talk) 03:51, 23 October 2010 (UTC)
Hello! I will be reviewing this article for GA status. My review should be posted within the next few days. Cheers, Nikkimaria (talk) 03:51, 23 October 2010 (UTC)
- I've decided to list this article as a GA. Consider the below suggestions for further improvement. Cheers, Nikkimaria (talk) 14:05, 23 October 2010 (UTC)
- Thank you, the feedback has been very helpful to the article. KimChee (talk) 19:23, 23 October 2010 (UTC)
Writing and formatting
[edit]- "He moved to various locations as a youth" - wording is very vague. Would it be accurate to say he moved frequently during his youth?
Fixed.
- "her daughter Charla...the head...the mouth" - either change the "the"s to "her", or add "the body of" before "her daughter"
Done.
- "dropped off Charla" -> "dropped Charla off"
- Done.
- "Taylor arrived from Florida" -> "Taylor had arrived from Florida"
- Done.
- "Taylor shared his pizza with his uncle Gordon Lee while joined by attorney Ed Brass and Catholic priest Reyes Rodriguez" - grammar, and didn't he fire the attorney earlier?
- Fixed.
- Don't wikilink the same terms multiple times, particularly not well-known terms like Florida
- Done.
- "Shortly before midnight, January 26, 1996" - so, was 11:59 or 12:01 January 26? Not clear
- Fixed. Rephrased the section in a more straightforward manner.
Accuracy and verifiability
[edit]- Was the dummy gun loaded with a blank or a wax bullet? The two are not the same thing
- Fixed.
Broad
[edit]- Was he ever convicted in juvenile court for his earlier crimes in Florida?
The available sources indicate that he was institutionalized, but do not specify a juvenile conviction. KimChee (talk) 19:23, 23 October 2010 (UTC)
- It might be helpful to list his sisters and half-sisters
- This is also limited by the information from available sources, but an additional half-sister that was identified in a source has been added to the article. KimChee (talk) 19:23, 23 October 2010 (UTC)
Neutrality
[edit]No issues noted
Stability
[edit]No issues noted
Images
[edit]No issues noted