Talk:James Bond (literary character)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cerebellum (talk · contribs) 11:35, 4 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I will be reviewing this article. --Cerebellum (talk) 11:35, 4 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

This is an outstanding article! I wish I could offer more feedback, but I had difficulty finding things to improve.

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
This was all very good. The lead especially was a good encapsulation of the article as a whole.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
I expected this to be a problem, but actually the sourcing is impeccable. Good job!
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
I admire your strength in resisting the temptation to include a detailed fictional character biography.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Other than perhaps adding an image of Felming, no problems here.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
I have left a couple suggestions below, but they are quite minor. I am happy to pass this, and if you intend to take this to FAC I don't foresee any problems.

Prose: an average intake of sixty custom-made cigarettes. I think you mean sixty custom-made cigarettes per day.

Structure: For the continuation Bond works, would it make sense to put the Kingsley Amis material above the John Gardner material, since he came before Gardner chronologically?

Sort of, yes! What I wanted to do was put in the writers of numerous books first (Gardner & Benson) before moving onto the one book contributors. Although Amis was a notable writer and provided the Bond canon with an excellent and sympathetic work, he had less effect on the series than the Gardner and Benson because of their sheer weight of numbers and the fact they were the ones who tinkered with Fleming's formula SchroCat (^ • @) 06:23, 5 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

'Tastes and style: It may not be necessary to have such an exhaustive list of the drinks from On Her Majesty's Secret Service.

I've left the list in as it's an example of the drink Bond went through in the course of one book. SchroCat (^ • @) 06:23, 5 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Prose: This extravagance was more noteworthy for Bond eating exotic, local foods when abroad, at a time when most of his readership did not travel abroad. I do not understand this sentence. "More noteworthy" in comparison to what?

I think it is a comprehensive, well sourced and very well-written article. I removed one sentence which was a critique by someone who appears to me not to be qualified to analyse literary works (a lifestyle writer for The Times), although it's not a big deal really. Another fine article! Betty Logan (talk) 19:01, 4 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]