Talk:Hassan Hassanzadeh Amoli
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revert without reason
[edit]@Yamaguchi先生: there is no good reason to revert.--m,sharaf (talk) 23:43, 30 September 2015 (UTC)
- Hello Mehdi ghaed, would you please consider utilizing the Wikipedia:Draft system, as proposed to you earlier today by Anders Feder? [1] There are numerous grammatical issues with your recent changes, such that it would require rewriting all of the changes made. Regards, Yamaguchi先生 23:46, 30 September 2015 (UTC)
- hello. I don't think that this page in terms of editing is in such a way that could be reverted.in spite of that I add the name of the page to Guild of Copy Editors.--m,sharaf (talk) 08:58, 1 October 2015 (UTC)
Questions following October 5, 2015, GOCE copy-edit
[edit]I have just finished copy-editing the article. In some instances, I had to make the best guess as to what was meant, and to get the sentence into Standard English. Please review to be sure I have captured (expressed) what was intended. I have a few questions and concerns:
1) I think the two dates given in the solar year calendar should be accompanied by the equivalent year in the Western calendar.
2) In the second paragraph of the section Hassan Hasanzadeh Amoli#Early life, we read:
- He studied under the supervision of Sayyed Ahmad Lavasani; he then went to Marvi Madrasah by order of Muhammad Taghi Amoli.
Did Muhammad Taghi Amoli really order Amoli to go to Marvi Madrasah? If so, all right, but are you sure Muhammad Taghi Amoli didn't just recommend, or urge, Amoli to go to Marvi Madrasah? If so, then "by order of" could be changed to "at the recommendation of" or "at the urging of".
3) Is it just a coincidence that Muhammad Taghi Amoli and Hassan Hasanzadeh Amoli have the same last name? Readers might wonder. Are the two related in some way? If so, perhaps some information could be given. If they are not related in any way, perhaps "no relation to Hassan Hasanzadeh Amoli" could be added in parentheses (...) after the first mention of Muhammad Taghi Amoli.
4) The partial sentence just after that is "Some of his masters are:". I think it should be explained what "masters" means here. Also, are all of these people still living? If any of them are deceased, "are" should be changed to "have been".
5) It would be nice if some information could be included about what makes this man unique, what makes him different from other ayatollahs or clerics. That would make the article more interesting. Corinne (talk) 02:41, 6 October 2015 (UTC)
References
[edit]I noticed a number of references are the url to a Google Book link. I though editors might be interested in a tool which takes a link as input and creates a (usually) properly formatted ref.
Wikipedia citation tool for Google Books
I used it to improve one such reference.
It really helps creates a much cleaner list of references. I hope you will try it.--S Philbrick(Talk) 21:59, 4 February 2016 (UTC)
his masters
[edit]Sayyed Ali qazi is not his master.Mostafa.7670 (talk) 20:15, 8 October 2016 (UTC)