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Comments

A few comments. Fighter ace is already wikilinked in the first sentence, so there is probably no need to say it again in the second sentence.

The don't make me click rule had been pointed out to me on a number of A-class and FA-class reviews. And every time I had to add a sentence explaining what a fighter ace is. It would be strange to take it out at B-class and then to add it again at GA, A or FA-class. MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:10, 19 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I apologise for making an unnecessary comment then.

Early Biography. What happened before 1937?

I don't know. MisterBee1966 (talk)

If you can find in any of your sources anything on his early life, it really needs to go in biography.

I agree MisterBee1966 (talk) 16:09, 19 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Iron Cross. There is a "(1939)" I do not think is necessary. The 1939 type Iron cross is the only one he could get.

Well, no I disagree. There is a big distinction between the 1813, 1870, 1914 and 1939 Iron Cross. Since a number of World War II soldiers at least received the 1914 version and the 1939 clasp, I feel that it is important to make it clear who received what. MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:10, 19 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Since he was born in 1916, the only Iron cross he could get was the 1939 one, but I take your point.

Ace in a day. A little more detail would help. Where, what aircraft, in one or several sorties.

I will see what I can find out MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:13, 19 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Good work D2306 (talk) 13:26, 19 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Note 2 needs fixing "but according to (?) he had achieved ..."

fixed MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:12, 19 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Other than that, good.D2306 (talk) 22:22, 18 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

More improvements I have thought about:

Format the References section with {{cite book}} template

done MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:52, 21 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Split "Biography" into subsections, like "Early life", "Early years of sevice", "Eastern front", "Death"D2306 (talk) 16:07, 20 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Not sure, a one paragraph section is not advisable. MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:52, 21 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You don't have to split into paragraph sized subsections. Articles about other German Aces, like Hartmann do have subsections. The section "Biography"(I think since the whole article is a biography the name of the section could be changed too) is too big in my opinions as a single bulk of text. If you are confident that this is unnecessary, leave it as it is.D2306 (talk) 15:19, 21 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I renamed the section "Military career". For now I want to leave it as one section. MisterBee1966 (talk) 16:50, 21 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Updated to B-class. Perhaps further improvements could be made with a peer reviewD2306 (talk) 12:08, 22 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Possibly add a table

I created a table for his aerial victories that might look good in the article. You can change it around because it has some blanks if I couldn't find that info.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Marine79/sandbox —Preceding unsigned comment added by Marine79 (talk • contribs) 05:54, 9 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]