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I usually work on Chinese History articles, but this fellow seemed so important and intriguing in my mind that I couldn't just leave his article in the dilapidated state that it was when I first came upon it yesterday. I hope everyone enjoys the now comprehensive read, even though the article as of now isn't even 32 KB yet! This is certainly the shortest article I've ever submitted to be a FAC.--Pericles of AthensTalk 03:06, 15 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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"Involved through no fault of his own in the bankruptcy of the Buonaccorsi Company, part of the larger failure of the Bardi, Villani was imprisoned for debt in 1346.[19][20] However, it is known that several events described in Villani's Cronica surrounding the Buonaccorsi's bankruptcy was written to deliberately obscure the truth about the company's fraudulent behavior.[21]"

"Involved through no fault of his own" wordy. - "Though he was not involved" is slightly better I think. ["The bankruptcy of the Buonaccorsi Company dragged Villani into prison, as he was a main partner"]
Why "however"? what previous judgement is being contradicted?
Should li[n]ke to Compagnia dei Bardi instead of Bardi which is a disamguation page which does not include Compagnia dei Bardi.
there's some interesting information regarding the cause of bankruptcy of many banks in the Compagnia dei Bardi article. - Giovanni blamed it on British loans, - and it seems a lot of banks went bankrupt. - perhaps "part of the larger failure of the bardi" is not necessarily helpful, as the cause of the larger failure of the bardi is perfectly unknown.
--Kiyarrllston 15:08, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

PS: strikethroughs and [in brackets] added--Kiyarrllston 15:43, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Don't know if you noticed, but Compagnia dei Bardi was already linked in the "See Also" section. I just deleted it from "See Also" and put "Compagnia dei Bardi" as a hidden link behind "Bardi". I agree, that is a much more helpful link.--Pericles of AthensTalk 16:43, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

That extra "however" was just a left-over word from when I was playing around with moving sentences here and there to get a better flow to the article. I just deleted the extra "however". Fixed.--Pericles of AthensTalk 16:45, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I have reworded that paragraph slightly in favor of how you've suggested, although instead of "dragged Villani into prison" I stated "led to Villani's conviction and imprisonment in 1346". Fair enough?--Pericles of AthensTalk 16:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
hehe, very nicely done :D, this was to be just one of many examples, but as I am easily distracted... I'll see if I can round up any other suspects to rough up.---Kiyarrllston 20:47, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I believe improvements can be found in:

  • Removing Introductory phrases: "During the Bubonic Plague, Villani wrote:" -> "Villani wrote during the Bubonic Plague:"; "After traveling abroad, Villani returned to Florence in 1307 where he married and settled down for a life of city politics.";
  • Removing parenthesis:(this charge was later cleared). - when was this cleared? why was it cleared? if important remove parenthesis only, if unimportant also remove information. - removing parenthesis should improve flow, parenthesis should not deter from flow.
  • Linking: Who is the historian Louis Green? the Louis Green article is about someone else. it'd be nice to have Louis Green (historian) or similar.
  • Prose: "The Cronica of Villani [is] has been used by modern historians as an incredibly rich historical record; its greatest value to modern historians is the described people, data, and events belonging to the age in which Villani lived" -wordy/redundant

also :Doesn't "Nuova Cronica" properly translate as "New Chronicle"?--Kiyarrllston 21:46, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for not iterating this here - I have crossed out my opposition, and have declared my opinion on the candidateship as neutral, presumably any further improvements would be to get a declaration of "support" for the candidateship.- I like the idea of Louis Green being linked, indeed because he is the noted more time in the article, I'd really prefer them all to be linked, I think wikipedia is lacking on it's coverage of historiography and authors that you quote should be notable or not in the article, and thus encyclopedic. - What about the other areas for improvement? what did you think of them? Those are more important to improving the article. - Thank you for reading my comment. I hope I have been helpful, please let me know how I could do better.--Kiyarrllston 00:45, 4 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

GIANTS JUST WON THE SUPERBOWL. Oh yeah, and I started the article on Kenneth R. Bartlett.--Pericles of AthensTalk 03:11, 4 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
hmm :D

--- Sentence:"Giovanni Villani was born into the Florentine merchant middle class, the son of Villano di Stoldi di Bellincione, who came from an old and well-respected arti maggiori family of merchants." long compound setence, awkward. Giovanni Villani was born into the Florentine middle class. His father was Villano di Stoldi di Bellincione, a descendant of a well-respected arti maggiori family of merchants" is slightly better I think.--Kiyarrllston 14:22, 7 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I agree, so I have changed it.--Pericles of AthensTalk 17:07, 7 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

disambig

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jubilee needs disambig. Randomblue (talk) 20:56, 5 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! Fixed that.--Pericles of AthensTalk 01:28, 6 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

date of birth

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c. 1276 or 1280-is this mean period from 1276. and 1280. or two just two dates 1276. or 1280?--Vojvodaeist 17:38, 21 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Good question; the source I used did not specify if it was between those dates or if it was either one of those dates.--Pericles of AthensTalk 17:42, 21 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I supposed that it is beetwen this dates but I can't be sure. --Vojvodaeist 17:44, 21 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

EB1910 to EB1911

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I suggest, that as there is a EB 1911 Wikisource article, that, if possible, the 1910 EB citations are replaced with ones from the Ugo Balzani article in EB 1911. -- PBS (talk) 16:34, 9 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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