Talk:1940 South Carolina hurricane/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: –Juliancolton | ^Talk 02:05, 6 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good in general. I noticed a few areas that could do with some improvement:
The lead seems rather brief. As the article is fairly sizable, two paragraphs of info are probably more suitable.
A few more meteorological details would be good, if possible. For example, the date of the hurricane's deterioration into a tropical storm.

Placing this on-hold for now. Thanks for your efforts on the article so far. –Juliancolton | ^Talk 02:05, 6 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I have added the detail about its downgrade to a tropical storm, and added 2 1/2 lines into the lead. With the lead one paragraph long, and the article below it 5 paragraphs long, are you sure we need a second paragraph of a lead? I'm worried that instead of summarizing the article below that we'd be copying increasing amounts of content into the lead. Thegreatdr (talk) 13:54, 9 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Good point. I'm going ahead and passing the article, nice work. –Juliancolton | ^Talk 15:49, 9 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]