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Reviewer: AustralianRupert (talk · contribs) 12:18, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status. AustralianRupert (talk) 12:18, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]


Progression

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  • Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
  • Version of the article when review was closed: [2]

Technical review

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  • no dabs found by the tools;
  • no issues with ext links;
  • images lack alt text. While it is not a requirement, you might consider adding it in.

Criteria

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  • It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  • the article is inconsistent in its use of English variation. For instance: "armored", "center", "installments", "rumored" (US), "defence", "metres", "armoured" (British);
  • in the lead: "She is considered by some to be the world's first armoured cruiser", in the body: "Considered the first true armoured cruiser". This is slightly inconsistent, IMO. The lead basically implies that there is some doubt about the claim, but the body seems more definate;
    • Changed to reflect the lede
  • "She represented France, together with the ironclad Hoche and the cruiser Surcouf during the opening". I think you need a second comma after "Surcouf" to denote the end of the subordinate clause;
    • Indeed.
  • some repetition here: "and they required that a third funnel be added which required extensive" (required x 2). Perhaps reword;
    • Second use changed to necessitated.
  • the Commons link might be better presented using {{Commons category}} (suggestion only);
    • Perhaps if I actually had some other external links.
  • the template for 19th century French weapons might be better presented in collapsed form. This could be achieved by adding "|state=collapsed" to the template mark up (suggestion only);
    • Agreed. What I really need to do is to build a navbox for French armoured cruisers, but I'm not that interested in doing so right now.
  • It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  • No issues.
  • It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  • "recommissioned until September 1908 for service on the Moroccan station". Was this in response to a "crisis" of some sort? Or do we know what the ship did while on station?
    • There's no further info on why she was sent to Morocco or what she did there, but it was probably related to the French attempts to consolidate their control over the country. There were multiple crises over that in the 1900s as it was one of the last uncolonised countries in Africa.
  • No issues.
  • It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  • No issues.
  • It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
    a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images): c (non-free images have fair use rationales): d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:
  • No issues.
  • Overall:
    a Pass/Fail:

Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:12, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

No worries, looks good to go. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 00:31, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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