Talk:Episode 523/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 23W (talk · contribs) 06:28, 9 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one. 23W 06:28, 9 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Just watched the episode. Now I got that song stuck in my head, hahaha. dat hair.

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
dupdet spotchecks turn up no bulk copying.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Specific

Maybe a wikilink to garter (stockings)?
I'm surprised there isn't any article on the subject of wedding telegrams. It must be chiefly Australian; could use a definition.
The critical response section is a little verbose; some of the quotes could probably be condensed as to focus on opinion rather than recapping the plot; e.g.:

'Kelly Bourne from TV Week described the episode, saying "It's the television wedding of the year when Neighbours favourite teenage lovers Scott Robinson and Charlene Mitchell tie the knot in a fairytale ceremony."'; perhaps instead: 'Kelly Bourne from TV Week described the episode as "the television wedding of the year" and "a fairytale ceremony."'
'The head of drama at Network Ten, Rick Maier, stated "Scott and Charlene's wedding was the biggest television event of 1987. Who can forget (Angry Anderson's power ballad and wedding theme) 'Suddenly', the veil, and the kiss. Not only a major turning point for Neighbours, but a wedding that stopped a nation."'; to: 'The head of drama at Network Ten, Rick Maier, stated "Scott and Charlene's wedding was the biggest television event of 1987. ... Not only a major turning point for Neighbours, but a wedding that stopped a nation."'

Good read. Not a soap opera type, but this kept my attention. I hope you'll be able to assess these things; I think this could be an FA in time. 23W 23:11, 9 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much for the review and for your kinds words about taking the article to FA. I'll start working on the points raised. - JuneGloom Talk 01:03, 11 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I've fixed the issues raised, although I wasn't quite sure what to do with the wedding telegrams. I've added a link to telegrams and mentioned that they are from those unable to attend the wedding. - JuneGloom Talk 17:45, 12 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Good work; I think readers will be able to better understand what it means the way you've rephrased it, and the critical reception looks good. Pass! 23W 20:59, 12 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! - JuneGloom Talk 00:39, 13 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]