Talk:Star on the Mountain/GA1

GA review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 17:10, 10 April 2022 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Overall, it's almost there. The first section could use a reflow to make the paragraphs less choppy, and there are two minor comma items, one minor reference item (and a suggestion), and alt text on the image. @Bsoyka: 7-day hold. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:30, 10 April 2022 (UTC)

Copy changes

• holiday season, but - remove comma

   Done: Diff. Bsoyka (talk) 19:54, 10 April 2022 (UTC)

• November 29, 1940 at - MOS:DATECOMMA needed

   Done: Diff. Bsoyka (talk) 19:54, 10 April 2022 (UTC)

• A lot of choppy one- or two-sentence paragraphs in "20th century" header

   Fixed: Combined some of them together, hopefully flows better now. Bsoyka (talk) 02:05, 12 April 2022 (UTC)

Other

• Add page numbers to newspapers.com refs (this requires looking at the page)

   Done: Diff. Bsoyka (talk) 19:54, 10 April 2022 (UTC)

• References are archived.

   Note: Archived one more that I must've missed. Bsoyka (talk) 02:05, 12 April 2022 (UTC)

• Since it's been a year and the Herald-Post is now in newspapers.com for the full run, do a search to see if that newspaper has any articles that might be relevant.

   Doing...: Definitely a lot to sift through there, working on it. Bsoyka (talk) 02:05, 12 April 2022 (UTC)

  @Sammi Brie: Calling this one  Done: I think I've gathered as much as I can from the Herald-Post. Diff. Bsoyka (talk) 17:12, 17 April 2022 (UTC)

  Going to pass for GA. It definitely has a bit more heft with the Herald-Post materials. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:26, 17 April 2022 (UTC)

• The lone image is PD, but it does need alt text.

   Done: Used A five-pointed star made up of white lights on a mountain during an orange sunset, with a tree silhouette in the foreground. Diff. Bsoyka (talk) 19:54, 10 April 2022 (UTC)

Review in progress