Talk:Revolutionary activity of Vladimir Lenin/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 18:50, 17 February 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Midnightblueowl (talk)

Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 18:50, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

• a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
• b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

WP:LEAD:

Check for WP:LEAD: Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done Check for Introductory text:  Done Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done Major Point 1: Saint Petersburg and foreign visits: 1893–95 "Following on from his early life, during which he had become devoted to the cause of revolution against the Tsarist regime in the Russian Empire and converted to Marxism, Lenin moved to St. Petersburg. There he joined a revolutionary cell, and became a vocal advocate for Marxism within the revolutionary socialist movement. Entering a relationship with fellow Marxist Nadezhda Krupskaya, he toured Western Europe to build ties with other Russian revolutionary emigres and learn more about the international Marxist movement. Upon returning to Russia, he was arrested for sedition in 1895" (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 2: Siberian exile: 1895–1900 "and exiled to Shushenskoye in the Minusinsky District of eastern Siberia for three years, where he devoted his time to translating and writing revolutionary texts." (not a concise summary of the corresponding section in the body) Major Point 3: Munich, London and Geneva: 1900–05 "His exile over, in 1900 he moved to Western Europe, where he joined the editorial board of Iskra, the publication of the Marxist Russian Social Democratic Labour Party (RSDLP). Iskra's base was moved from Munich to London and then to Geneva, each time accompanied by Lenin. At the party's second congress, held in London in 1902, a major schism erupted between Lenin and his supporters (the Bolsheviks) and Julius Martov and his supporters (the Mensheviks); Lenin emphasised a strongly centralised party controlled largely by the leadership, whereas Martov accepted a wider party with more independence of thought." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 4: Revolution and aftermath: 1905–14 "Lenin returned to Russia briefly during the Revolution of 1905, but fled again when the Tsarist authorities defeated the revolutionary forces and cracked down on dissent." & "Living in Paris and then Krakow, he focused on internal conflict within the Marxist movement, opposing the ideas of the Mensheviks and Alexander Bogdanov; he penned Materialism and Empirio-criticism to counter his critics." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 5: First World War: 1914–17 "During the First World War, he relocated to Switzerland, where he argued that socialists should work toward converting that "imperialist war" into a continent-wide "civil war" in which the proletariat could overthrow the bourgeoisie. He summarised his thought in the book Imperialism, the Highest Stage of Capitalism and also re-interpreted Marxism on the basis of reading Hegelian philosophy." (summarised well in the lead) Check for Relative emphasis:  Done Major Point 1: Saint Petersburg and foreign visits: 1893–95 "Following on from his early life, during which he had become devoted to the cause of revolution against the Tsarist regime in the Russian Empire and converted to Marxism, Lenin moved to St. Petersburg. There he joined a revolutionary cell, and became a vocal advocate for Marxism within the revolutionary socialist movement. Entering a relationship with fellow Marxist Nadezhda Krupskaya, he toured Western Europe to build ties with other Russian revolutionary emigres and learn more about the international Marxist movement. Upon returning to Russia, he was arrested for sedition in 1895" (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2: Siberian exile: 1895–1900 "and exiled to Shushenskoye in the Minusinsky District of eastern Siberia for three years, where he devoted his time to translating and writing revolutionary texts." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 3: Munich, London and Geneva: 1900–05 "His exile over, in 1900 he moved to Western Europe, where he joined the editorial board of Iskra, the publication of the Marxist Russian Social Democratic Labour Party (RSDLP). Iskra's base was moved from Munich to London and then to Geneva, each time accompanied by Lenin. At the party's second congress, held in London in 1902, a major schism erupted between Lenin and his supporters (the Bolsheviks) and Julius Martov and his supporters (the Mensheviks); Lenin emphasised a strongly centralised party controlled largely by the leadership, whereas Martov accepted a wider party with more independence of thought." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 4: Revolution and aftermath: 1905–14 "Lenin returned to Russia briefly during the Revolution of 1905, but fled again when the Tsarist authorities defeated the revolutionary forces and cracked down on dissent." & "Living in Paris and then Krakow, he focused on internal conflict within the Marxist movement, opposing the ideas of the Mensheviks and Alexander Bogdanov; he penned Materialism and Empirio-criticism to counter his critics." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 5: First World War: 1914–17 "During the First World War, he relocated to Switzerland, where he argued that socialists should work toward converting that "imperialist war" into a continent-wide "civil war" in which the proletariat could overthrow the bourgeoisie. He summarised his thought in the book Imperialism, the Highest Stage of Capitalism and also re-interpreted Marxism on the basis of reading Hegelian philosophy."s (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done The Russian communist revolutionary and politician Vladimir Lenin began his active revolutionary activity in 1892, and continued till assuming power in the Russian Revolution of 1917. Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done Check for Proper names and titles:  Done Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None Check for Pronunciation: None Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done Check for Biographies: NA Check for Organisms: NA Check for Biographies of living persons: NA Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done Check for Non-English titles: Check for Usage in first sentence: Check for Separate section usage: Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None

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2: Verifiable with no original research

• a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
• b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google.)

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• c. No original research:  Done

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3: Broad in its coverage

a. Major aspects:

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b. Focused:
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4: Neutral

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5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images  Done (PD)

Images:

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I'm glad to see your work here. I do have some insights based on the above checklist that I think will improve the article:

• I think the lead can be improved in order to provide an accessible overview and to give relative emphasis for the Siberian exile: 1895–1900.

Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. Midnightblueowl, please feel free to strike out any recommendation from this review which you think will not help in improving the article which is our main aim here. All the best, --Seabuckthorn ♥ 22:52, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

Thanks once again Seabuckthorn; I have made the necessary addition to the introduction. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:28, 20 February 2014 (UTC)

Thanks, Midnightblueowl, very much for writing such excellent articles. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 22:53, 20 February 2014 (UTC)

Promoting the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 22:53, 20 February 2014 (UTC)

Once again, I owe you my thanks for going to all the effort of reviewing one of my articles, Seabuckthorn. Kind regards, Midnightblueowl (talk) 23:07, 20 February 2014 (UTC)