Talk:Deliver (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 20:07, 19 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Look where those Whitney Phillips link in the lede, infobox, and first body paragraph (others?) go and check that's what you want.

Should you mention in "Jeremy Reeves, Jonathan Yip, Ray McCullough, and Ray Romulos played the instruments." that those three are The Stereotypes?

"Lauren Jauregui identified it as "a song from the album that best shows off its R&B moments", and compared it to music released by Destiny's Child. Discussing the single's composition, she said: "The melodies are crazy and the concept is awesome. It bounces, and it’s super clever. Definitely one of my favourites on the album."[8] Ally Brooke spoke positively of the composition, citing it as "almost a creative chaos", and Normani said that "Deliver" reminded her of "Endless Love" from the group's debut album Reflection (2015).[1] Brooke compared "Deliver" to music released by Motown, and described its sound as a "kind of funky, jazz, R&B soul".[13]" Should be pointed out these aren't critics, but are the group's members.

I think it would be rather obvious for the links. I am not sure how to clarify this in the prose without putting "Fifth Harmony group member" in front of each of the names and it would be rather clunky/awkward. I am open to suggestions though! Aoba47 (talk) 20:42, 19 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

You're right, it is obvious form the links, and I suspose most people who end up here will know what Fifth Harmony is (unlike, say, yours truly an hour ago!) Courcelles (talk)

No worries. I honestly know very little about Fifth Harmony myself, and primarily took up this article to try and do something outside of my area of knowledge so I can completely understand your point lol. Aoba47 (talk) 20:47, 19 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Tedious, I know, but we need a citation after " Dinah Jane said: "It’s the kinda song for when you’re getting down with your man.""

The quote is supported through the citation in the follow sentence (i.e. citation 14). Aoba47 (talk) 20:42, 19 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Still, it's one of the very few explicit rules of GA, quotes get cited immediately afterwards. Courcelles (talk) 20:45, 19 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I have heard of this rule before, but I have made the revision. Thank you for the note! Aoba47 (talk) 20:48, 19 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"AXS' Lucas Villa AXS responded" Something isn't right here using AXS twice. And who was he "responding" to?

He was "responding positively" to the song. I have removed the second instance of AXS. Aoba47 (talk) 20:42, 19 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise, looks to be of good quality. Courcelles (talk) 20:21, 19 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Courcelles: Thank you for the review! I believe that I have responded to everything. Please let me know if anything else needs to be improved. Aoba47 (talk) 20:42, 19 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

NOting for the record I checked the two pieces of NFC in the article and find both in compliance with WP:NFCC. Courcelles (talk)