Talk:2012 Delhi Daredevils season/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The C of E (talk · contribs) 18:08, 2 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

My first observation is that the subject of the article requires bolding on first reference to it. Here are a number of issues that I thing need to be fixed before this can become a GA:

"is a part of the"... Should really be something like "who play in the..." Done
"it topped the league", A bit slang-y maybe something like "they came top of the league"

I feel that the current one is better.

" it failed to win any match", don't you mean "They failed to win any matches"?

Didn't get you.

Should say "added players such as...." Done
All reference to the club should be as "they" rather than "it" or simply Delhi

I have taken DD as singular in the whole article. I believe that its a better option as the whole article needs to be consistent.

Skipper is slang, it should really say captain or club captain

Its a highly used term in cricket.

Use US$ for the first reference to the money, then use $ as it's a bit cumbersome to keep using US$ when it's clear it is in American dollars. Done
Reference to the money should be in numbers rather than words if the figure is under a million. (ie. $450,000 and $50,000) Done
"leaving out.." should be clarified Done
finished in third place, not "finished at the third position" Done
Just need to say that "they won by..." (and vice versa), no need for extra "it" Done
"battle of the heavyweights is WP:POV and should be removed.

That has been quoted, so I don't think it comes under POV.

"claiming the most number o wickets", don't think I need to specify what is wrong with that. Done
In the Warriors pic, the description should say The Daredevil's playing against. Done
Should be a comma before Titans Done
In the Reaction section, $ should be delinked and for INR lakh should be linked

Done It already done.

The IPL logo should be removed from being next to the IPL portal.

This is how the template works. And btw this logo is not copyrighted.

Is the picture of KP really necessary as it's referring to the previous season? Done

That being said, the other pics are fine. Just need to fix these issues and I'll have another look. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 18:08, 2 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

As per the Wikicup, I am obliged to say that I am also competing in it too. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 18:41, 2 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your patience. ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ ^Talk ^Email 17:35, 26 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

There's still inconsistency with the prices (example: "$50 thousand"). The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 17:50, 26 March 2013 (UTC)

Done[reply]

All dne then. A new GA. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 08:19, 27 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]