Talk:Commander Keen (video game)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: IDV (talk · contribs) 09:56, 18 September 2016 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this one.--IDV^talk 09:56, 18 September 2016 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead/infobox

• The game feature - should be "features"
• The game was announced in April 2001 and released soon after. The game - not a GA requirement, but I would suggest changing the second "The game" to "It", to avoid having two consecutive sentences begin with the same phrase
• Jim Meston is mentioned in development, and should be included in the infobox

Gameplay

• The game also includes moving platforms and teleporters - This reads as "in addition to the platforms Keen can stand on, there are moving platforms". I assume he can stand on moving ones as well.
• I think you should probably introduce the concept of entering levels from the overview map before Once entered, the only way to exit a level
• The game contains a variety of enemies in their levels, - not a GA requirement, but I would suggest the simpler The levels contain a variety of enemies
• who must then be jumped on with the pogo stick to kill or destroy. - am I reading this incorrectly, or should it be to be killed or destroyed?

Plot

• I have never played this or any other Keen game - sacrilege, I'm sure - so I will just have to trust you that the plot summary is accurate. It looks good, with one small exception: won't should be changed to will not

Development

• Everything seems in order here. I would probably personally name the section something like "Background and development", but that's just my own opinion and not something you need to do for this review

Reception

• the music and sound effects lack of upgrade - should probably be the music and sound effects' lack of upgrade. Everything else looks fine.

Final comments/discussion

This article is very close to GA, with just a few minor changes that need to be made. I have also left a few suggestions that aren't necessary for GA purposes, but that I still think would improve the article. I'll leave this  On hold for a week - if the issues are addressed by then, I'll pass the article.--IDV^talk 11:28, 18 September 2016 (UTC)

All the issues have been addressed (by me). Gamingforfun³⁶⁵ (talk) 00:35, 19 September 2016 (UTC)

Huh. Yeah, you did; I wasn't going to be able to get to it until tomorrow or Tuesday. Thanks! --PresN 01:08, 19 September 2016 (UTC)

You are welcome. Gamingforfun³⁶⁵ (talk) 02:47, 19 September 2016 (UTC)

@Gamingforfun365 and PresN: Thank you very much! Commander Keen is now a good article.--IDV^talk 20:24, 21 September 2016 (UTC)