Talk:Chivi vireo/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:31, 21 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• Four para lead is far too much, two large paras is fine for an article of this modest size.
• "off white" wouldn't that be hyphenated in this adjectival usage?

Done.

• What's a supercilium?

Linked.

• "has 9 subspecies" nine.

Done.

• You use "It..." about nine consecutive times in the lead. Occasionally throw back to the name.

Done.

• "May-June or October-January" I would use prose, i.e. May to June, or October to January...

Done

• " are incubated by" links to a dab page.

Fixed.

• "an onomatopoeia.[1] Vieillot" care to explain?

Added.

• "migrates" could link this.

Linked.

• "nominate race" is race the right word, not species?

Race is used as a synonym for subspecies, but I'll replace it for clarity.

• "A chivi viero in Sao Paulo, Brazil." fragment, no full stop required.

Done.

• Not sure you need to link colours like "pale brown". Body parts should be linked however, especially if they're not obvious like "beak".

Removed links for some of the more obvious colors, and added for the body parts that were unlinked.

• The distribution map in the infobox appears to be colour-coded but there's no key?

Added.

• "up until 1,900 m " up to an elevation of 1,900 m... There are two or three examples of this.

Done.

• "Eggs are laid in clutches of 2-4 eggs" repetitive "eggs" and should be an en-dash, or you could even write in prose, of two to four eggs.

Fixed.

• "The mass of eggs measured" surely this single value is an average?

Added average.

• "between 10-16 days" between 10 and 16 or just 10–16 days (no need for "between" and should be an en-dash).

Fixed.

• " 10-13 days" en-dash.

Fixed.

• Status should contain IUCN's assessment.

Done.

• Date formats in references should be consistent in format.

Could you clarify what should be done?

• Ref 8 has a couple of spaced hyphens in the title which should be en-dashes.

Replaced ref 8 with 6 because they're the same ref. AryKun (talk) 12:06, 27 September 2021 (UTC)

That's it for now, sorry for the delay in the review. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 09:21, 27 September 2021 (UTC)

• @The Rambling Man: I feel like I've dealt with all of the issues raised. Is there anything else? AryKun (talk) 08:05, 30 September 2021 (UTC)
  • I do re-checks and promotions in batches. Hopefully later today or tomorrow. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:13, 30 September 2021 (UTC)