Talk:Cerebral atherosclerosis

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MatthewMiller71 (talk) 02:35, 26 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Reviews from fellow classmates

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1. Quality of Information: 2
2. Article size: 1

10,929 bytes

3. Readability: 2

adding more links will make it more friendly to people with little scientific background.

4. Refs: 2

10 references, 8 from 2010 or later

5. Links: 1

could add more links, especially in introduction (for example, collagen, proteoglycans, fibronectin, etc.) also, no red links.

6. Responsive to comments: 2

no comments on talk page, so no responses needed.

7. Formatting: 2

formatting is easy to follow

8. Writing: 2

only a couple minor grammatical errors, but good overall writing.

9. Used real name or has real name on User TALK page: 2
10. Outstanding?: 1

good use of media, good use of recent sources, maybe add some more references or create your own media.

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Total: 17 out of 20

overall, the article is very good. Make it a little bit longer to reach the 15,000 bytes minimum. There are a couple places where you should add some commas or consider rewording the sentences. Link to more Wikipedia articles and add some red links.

Morgan Merritt (talk) 17:11, 19 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

1. Quality of Information: 2
2. Article size: 1

10,929 bytes--Does not reach the 15,000 byte minimum

3. Readability: 1

Background provided in the form of links, may want to alter the introduction to describe what atherosclerosis is and how cerebral atherosclerosis poses different threats that other kinds instead of focusing on smaller details such as the components of plaque.

4. Refs: 2

Minimum of 10 Citations met with a majority being in recent years

5. Links: 1

No red links to promote more pages related to Cerebral Atherosclerosis

6. Responsive to comments: 2

No comments made, so no actions are needed

7. Formatting: 2 8. Writing: 1

Some grammatical errors present throughout

9. Used real name or has real name on User TALK page: 2
10. Outstanding?: 2

The media used for the "Diagnosis" and "Treatment" sections are very helpful!

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Mmcmullen3 (talk) 05:36, 24 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

1. Quality of Information: 2 2. Article size:1

Did not reach minimum requirement

3. Readability:1

Language is not well explained making it difficult for out of field readers

4. Refs:2
5. Links:2
6. Responsive to comments:2
7. Formatting:2
8. Writing:2
9. Used real name or has real name on User TALK page:2
10. Outstanding?:1

Needs more content.

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Mac Merritt (talk) 09:45, 25 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Morgan Merritt, Mmcmullen3, and Mac Merritt for the comments and critiques on my work so far. I plan on continuing to improve the page over winter break, and will definitely make sure to incorporate your comments into my future edits. MatthewMiller71 (talk) 05:47, 11 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Moved from "Related diseases" section

First, see WP:MEDMOS#Sections; no "Related diseases. The following text has two citations, neither of which even mention Artherosclerosis. Moved here for discussion. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 17:12, 19 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Cerebral amyloid angiopathy (CAA)

CAA is a disease that roughly one-third of non-demented and two-thirds of individuals with dementia have. This disease is strongly associated with Alzheimers. Beta-amyloid peptides adhere to the sides of vessel walls in small blood vessels, which causes stenosis in the blood vessels. The peptides then weaken the smooth muscle walls of the blood vessels eventually leading to hemorrhaging or aneurysm formation. This causes cerebral microbleeds and ischemic lesions which contribute to cognitive decline.^[1]^[2]

References

^ Grinberg LT, Korczyn AD, Heinsen H (2012). "Cerebral amyloid angiopathy impact on endothelium". Experimental Gerontology (Review). 47 (11): 838–842. PMC 3500138. PMID 22944481.{{cite journal}}: CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)
^ Thal DR, Grinberg LT, Attems J (2012). "Vascular dementia: different forms of vessel disorders contribute to the development of dementia in the elderly brain". Experimental Gerontology (Review). 47 (11): 816–824. PMC 3470831. PMID 22705146.{{cite journal}}: CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)

[1] Grinberg LT, Korczyn AD, Heinsen H (2012). "Cerebral amyloid angiopathy impact on endothelium". Experimental Gerontology (Review). 47 (11): 838–842. PMC 3500138. PMID 22944481.{{cite journal}}: CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)

[2] Thal DR, Grinberg LT, Attems J (2012). "Vascular dementia: different forms of vessel disorders contribute to the development of dementia in the elderly brain". Experimental Gerontology (Review). 47 (11): 816–824. PMC 3470831. PMID 22705146.{{cite journal}}: CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)

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