Talk:Capture of Grenada (1779)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 15:05, 20 December 2011 (UTC)

I'll start this review shortly. Interesting topic! MathewTownsend (talk) 15:05, 20 December 2011 (UTC)

Review

• Lede

• "French forces were reembarked on the fleet" - I guess these is military terminology but I'm not sure what it means
  • "Embarkation" is a fairly well-defined concept independent of military uses... Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)

• Background

• "augmenting the fleet of Admiral Samuel Barrington" - so he was already there? (I must have missed that.)
  • The Royal Navy had more-or-less permanent stations in the West Indies. I didn't think any specific reference this (or the arrival of its most recent commander) was particularly necessary. I've added words mentioning Barrington's post. Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
• "the French at Martinique" - on Martinique? Fixed Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
• "Governor the marquis de Bouillé" - looks funny. Should it be Governer François Claude Amour?
  • Nobles are generally referred to by their title, so your suggestion would be wrong (or at least bad form). I've rephrased to make it less awkward. Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)

• French capture

• "called for three columns to attack the back side of the fortifications with the bayonet" - with bayonets? Fixed Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)

• Aftermath

• What is the significant of John Paul Jones attending the performance?
  • Nothing particularly significant, but I thought it an interesting bit of color. Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
• "In order to better defend against a similar attack to the one they launched" - I don't quite understand this sentence - maybe it's me. Rephrased Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
• "The divisions in Grenadian society" - social divisions? military divisions? Clarified Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)

• Caption

• "French political cartoon depicting acclamation of d'Estaing for his successes on Grenada and against Byron "- sounds funny. Rephrased Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)

• Everything else looks fine. A very clear, concise article.

• I made a few copy edits that you are free to reverse.[1]

MathewTownsend (talk) 21:04, 20 December 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for taking the time to review; I think I've addressed your concerns. Let me know if not... Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Does it follow the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

• Your careful writing and presentation is much appreciated!

MathewTownsend (talk) 17:03, 21 December 2011 (UTC)