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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 20:58, 2 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • Hi, I will review this article. FunkMonk (talk) 20:58, 2 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and the male has some black and white markings." Maybe add "black and white markings on its head and neck"?
  • "been recorded declining significantly" Looks a bit awkward. To decline?
  • "but in these areas has such a low reproductive success that populations cannot be maintained without immigration." Why?
  • The image under taxonomy seems a bit misplaced. Perhaps better under habitat or description?
    • There only really are relevant images for the behaviour section, so I just added extra photos. But I've moved it to dist/habitat and added an image of a male seen from the front to description. —innotata 20:06, 3 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "which is sometimes merged with melanurus" Synonymised with would be more accurate, and perhaps less ambiguous.
  • "There are reports by birdwatchers in suburban areas of South Africa of both increases in some regions" Specify what is being increased.
  • "Instances of hybridisation with the House Sparrow,[7] the Southern Grey-headed Sparrow, and the Sudan Golden Sparrow have been reported.[27]" Infertile?
  • "Clutches are larger further south, and during the peak of the breeding season." Why?
New edits are nice. If the answers to my questions can't be found at all, it won't hold the promotion back, of course. FunkMonk (talk) 04:33, 4 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I think I've addressed all your issues above. —innotata 18:41, 7 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Nice, passed then! FunkMonk (talk) 19:29, 7 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]