Talk:Brazilian jiu-jitsu ranking system/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 20:00, 31 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
"The Brazilian Jiu-Jitsu ranking system awards a practitioner different colored belts (worn as part of the uniform) to signify increasing levels of technical knowledge and practical skill." - this "awards a practitioner different colored belts (worn as part of the uniform)" is awkward and should be reworded

"While the system's structure shares its origins with the Judo ranking system and the origins of all colored belts, it now contains many of its own unique aspects and themes. " - Also a bit awkward. Remove second "the origins"; when exactly is "now"?

Particularly the last sentence is very confusing and odd.

Unfortunately the prose is generally awkward (eg " the first use of belts" - should be "types of belts", I think), so I put this on hold. Please request a copyedit as I can not continue if the prose is below standard
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

It's been three weeks and very little's been done on the prose, perhaps this should now be failed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 16:27, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Then I will fail it. The nominator can nominate this article any time in the future. Regards.--Kürbis (✔) 10:35, 26 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

My apologies gents, it was my first time nominating for GA and I was unaware of the importance of asking for a copyedit review ahead of time. Live and learn, right? Hopefully it'll be up to snuff soon. Thank you for your efforts. Buddy23Lee (talk) 23:49, 26 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]