Talk:Brad Davison/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:12, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Going to review this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 13:12, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. I will try to review one of your nominations. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

High school career

Wikilink football to American football and quarterback to its own article
- Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"He played quarterback on the football field" - the text in bold can be changed to say He played as a quarterback or He played in the quarterback position
- Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink the first mention of the term yards to Yards (gridiron football
- Linked to yard. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink touchdown to those unfamiliar with American football
- OK. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"in leading Maple Grove to a 25–5 record and state tournament berth." - and a state
- Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Davison earned a spot on USA Today's Minnesota All-State Team after averaged 24.4 points," - the text highlighted in bold can be changed to say averaging
- OK. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink the terms points, rebounds, assists and steals to their respective articles to help those not familiar with basketball
- Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
USA Today should be wikilinked on its first mention
- Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"He was ranked No. 119 recruit in his class by Rivals.com" - ranked the No. 119
- Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Also, No. could do with the template added to it to explain that it means number
- I don't know how to do this. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - It is done like this: No. MWright96 (talk) 16:22, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    - OK. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:29, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"and committed to Wisconsin on July 11, 2016, " - and committed to playing college basketball for Wisconsin
- Rephrased. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

College career

Wikilink free throw line to Free throw]
- Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"and making a team-high 60 times from 3-point range." - from the three-point range
- Rephrased. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Three point range would benefit from being linked to the article Three-point field goal
- OK. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"resulting in successful offseason shoulder surgery." - you can say it was the left shoulder that underwent surgery per Wisconsin State Journal source that cites the sentence this portion of text is in
- OK. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"and finished with a 15-18 record, " - the hyphen should be replaced by an en dash per MOS:DASH
- Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"which ranked them 9th in the Big Ten." - I feel like there are some words that are missing from the end of this sentence
- Rephrased. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Davison also received attention for perceived flopping, and the NCAA rule to combat flopping was informally called "the Brad Davison rule."" - repetition of the term "flopping"
- Changed to "the NCAA rule to combat it". ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Davison shot 3-of-20" - en dashes in place of hyphens please
- Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Davison was suspended one game by the Big Ten for a flagrant foul he committed the previous game " - try not to use neutral wording to replace the word highlighted in bold
- I don't see what the problem is, that is what the foul is called. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Personal life

"who both of played" - can be either worded to say who both played or both of whom played
- Good catch. Changed to "both of whom". ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:07, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink National Football Foundation, National Honor Society and Fellowship of Christian Athletes
- Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:07, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Davison has participated in over 120 hours of volunteer work," - more than
- Rephrased. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:07, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/respond to the queries raised above. MWright96 (talk) 15:03, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

- I have addressed your concerns. Thanks for the review. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:07, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - @Editorofthewiki: Nice work. Am promoting to GA class. I've made one edit to replace some hyphens with en dashes. MWright96 (talk) 16:36, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]