Talk:Borderline (Madonna song)/GA1

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OK, I will begin now and likely make some straightforward copyediting changes as I go. Please feel free to revert any that inadvertently change the meaning. Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:34, 24 July 2009 (UTC)

• It was regarded as the song which helped in Madonna's stardom. - in lede. Really? I wouldn't have thought so myself. The sentence just sort of sits there and comes across as a bit vague really.

• Elsewhere, the song reached the top twenty of the European nations, peaking the chart in Ireland. - all European nations? Some? I think there is an adjective missing here...

• The release of the video on MTV established her credentials further, as a pop star. - again, a bit vague and maybe peacocky - especially the "established her credentials" bit.

Again, nearly there. Casliber (talk · contribs) 06:21, 24 July 2009 (UTC)

Changed as best as I thought. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 06:37, 24 July 2009 (UTC)

OK, better - no dealbreakers left. Casliber (talk · contribs) 08:11, 24 July 2009 (UTC)