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Reviewer: AdrianGamer (talk · contribs) 08:24, 2 October 2015 (UTC)
- with critics praising the graphics and unique variations of gameplay - remove "unique" for consistency
- It won six categories from the 1991 - Instead of "categories", "awards" is much more straightforward.
- The game is a scrolling beat 'em up video game - The lead mentioned it as a "platform game". It should be mentioned again here as well.
- continues after reaching a game over. - Changes it to "after players die/get defeated"
- are presented with no depth - What does this mean?
- Graphical language. I've rephrased to "isometric" JAGUAR 19:27, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- I do not think mentioning the features of all levels is necessary. I suggest to trim it down a bit.
- Trimmed JAGUAR 19:27, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- a climbing/jumping "snake maze" - don't use "/"
- Removed JAGUAR 19:27, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- tower before an opposing rat does. - "rat" should not be mentioned here. Change it to simply "opponent"
- The player or players, choose one.
- To create a contrast to the popular media franchise, Rare added extra mechanics in the game to help separate it from similarly themed "beat 'em ups" - These extra mechanics are added because they wanted to create a contrast to the TMNT franchise, to separate it with other similar themed games, or both?
- Only the latter, clarified JAGUAR 19:27, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- however as the game gradually became more "graphic" - What is the meaning of "graphic" here?
- Graphic violence. I've linked it JAGUAR 19:27, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- Battletoads has been ported for various consoles upon its original June 1991 release for the NES - Do not use short form here. You should also wikilink NES.
- Ports for PC DOS and the Atari ST were planned by Mindscape but never released - Is there a reason for this?
- I couldn't find any reason why the ports were cancelled, I even tried searching through unreliable sources to find a reason but I found nothing. Usually ports are cancelled due to the consoles themselves not selling well (and how much of the market they owned), but still I wouldn't like to insinuate this in the article with nothing to back it up. If you think it's best, I could remove it? JAGUAR 19:37, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- The Mega Drive version of Battletoads features all of the levels, music and animations from the original, albeit with "toned down" difficulty. - Do not think this example is good. It does not provide any additional information. The previous sentence has already mentioned that all the ports are doing the same.
- I agree. I've rephrased this to make it sound less factual JAGUAR 19:37, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- owing to Rare's acquisition by Microsoft. - It is not really a reason that led to the release of Rare Replay.
- Rephrased JAGUAR 19:37, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- The co-op bug in the 11th level of the game, where player two's controller stopped working, has been fixed in this version. - People who are not familiar with the game would not understand what this means. I suggest to rephrase it to "Several bugs featured in the original release were fixed in Rare Replay."
- Done, thanks JAGUAR 19:37, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- In the same review, Paul Rand of CVG similarly - "from CVG" is no longer necessary, since you have mentioned "in the same review" already. You can also choose to rephrase it to "Paul Rand, another reviewer from CVG,"
- Rephrased JAGUAR 19:37, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- Rand heralded the "put-together" gameplay as addictive - What is "put-together"? What he is referring to?
- I'm not sure myself, I didn't think he was very clear in his review (some reviewers of the 80s/early 90s really had no editorial standards. In some cases I've actually had to guess what they were trying to say about the game). I've just cut "put-together", but I think he was trying to say that the gameplay had a lot of different variations in it JAGUAR 19:37, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- You can create a subsection called "Awards"
- I suggest to paraphrase some of the quotes in the difficulty section.
- This section was always a pain. I've done a few copyedits JAGUAR 19:41, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- Spike's Ending list is not really related to the game's difficulty. I suggest to move it somewhere in the main critical reception part.
- Moved (and rephrased) JAGUAR 19:41, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- Wow, I've never used that tool before! That's handy. I've done some copyediting here and there, but it seems that it picked up the plot from being similar to a source, which should be fine considering it's a plot and doesn't require a source. Retrogames is a Wiki-clone and I think that's why it explains it JAGUAR 19:57, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- Source 13 needs to have its author, work, date and accessdate field filled.
- Who published source 34?
- I looked everywhere, but there is no author given. The only thing I could do when adding this ref was to allocate the publisher to Virgin Media JAGUAR 19:51, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- The author field of source 35 need to be filled.
- Source 37's Spike should not be capitalized.
- Do not leave some fields n.a. in the template of File:Battletoads gameplay.jpg
- Updated FUR JAGUAR 19:51, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
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Article is well-written and comprehensive. There is only some minor issues. When you have addressed all the issues it should be good to go. AdrianGamer (talk) 14:28, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review AdrianGamer! I've attempted to address all of your concerns, and I hope I didn't leave anything out. The one thing that bothered me was not finding a reason why the Atari ST port was shelved, but where such information cannot be found I just leave it as it is. If there is anything else I can do, please let me know. Thanks again! JAGUAR 19:57, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- Thank you very much for addressing all the issues so quickly. Battletoads (video game) is now a Congratulations. AdrianGamer (talk) 02:12, 10 October 2015 (UTC)