Talk:Andrew Davis Bruce/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 (talk) 10:57, 11 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

Why is the article called A. D. Bruce instead of Andrew Davis Bruce? (per WP:NAME?)
As he was a soldier, how about adding a military infobox?
Lead could be longer.
In 1916, Bruce earned a doctorate of laws, roughly equivalent to a Bachelor of Science degree Haha. No.
as part of the Second Infantry Division's. Armies use names (Fourth Army); corps use roman numerals (XXIV Corps); the rest use ordinals (2nd Infantry Division). Please fix. And during the Great War period, it was called the "2nd Division".
5 Machine Gun Battalion should be "5th Machine Gun Battalion"
He served with the 33rd Infantry Division in Panama He didn't; roadside markers are not reliable sources. He served with the 33rd Infantry.
attending the Infantry School, the Field Artillery School, the Command and General Staff College, the Army War College, and the Naval War College. Links please.
You should say more about the Tank Destroyer arm
The following year he became commander of the 77th Infantry; this form is used for regiments. Should be 77th Infantry Division.
Reference 6 and 7. Page numbers required.
You could say more about the fighting on Guam, Leyte (the landing at Ormoc) and particularly Okinawa.
"commander of the 7th Division" Should be 7th Infantry Division
" Fourth Army" Link please
University of Houston: reference for last sentence.
Later years: Note where his papers are kept.

I'll hit all the points over the next couple days (didn't expect a review this fast). As for the name, google gets about 56k hits for a.d. bruce compared to 48k for his full name (minus links to wiki mirrors). Either one is fine by me, if you think it should absolutely be the full name i could move it there. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:16, 11 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- I was just asking. If everyone called him "A.D." then its okay. Otherwise we should move it. A redirect will be created. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:32, 11 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - I just noticed that sources vary on whether he had a bachelor of science or doctor of laws from Texas A&M. I guess that's why it was written like that. I'll try to figure out which is right; if unconfirmed i'll use bachelor of science, since that's more likely given he was 18 at the time. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 18:19, 12 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Please before failing if nominator is unable to fix problems drop a note by my talk page and I will fix them. --Iankap99 (talk) 04:16, 12 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Only need to do the lead, infobox, and double-check on additions now; rest is done. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 02:37, 17 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]