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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 04:53, 18 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lead

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  • Target Sony Music Entertainment to Sony Music
  • Move the video from links to infobox
  • "is a song recorded by Belgian" → "is a song by Belgian"
  • Target Sony Music Entertainment to Sony Music
  • "while production was handled by" → "while the production was handled by"
  • ""29" builds to a" → "the track builds to a"
  • "features the singer" → "features Nottet"
  • "The track's autobiographical lyrics" → "The autobiographical lyrics" as it is clear you are ref the track
  • "and also approaches" → "and also approach"
  • "the song's lyrical content" → "the track's lyrical content"
  • Refs 1 and 2 are not needed in the lead
You can do this though if there's not enough information to build a section. In this case, it's not worthy creating a "Reception" section, since the reviews are very shallow an there are only two peaks, so I think this should stay.
Cartoon network freak Maybe reception shouldn't be mentioned at all since two reviews is barely any? --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:26, 20 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Kyle Peake Removed. Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:07, 20 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "was uploaded onto" → "was uploaded to"
  • "his love interest (played by Fanny Sage) reaching" → "his love interest, played by Fanny Sage, reaching"
  • "Commercially, "29" charted" → "Commercially, the track charted"
  • WikiLink Ultratop on Belgium

Background and composition

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  • Target Sony Music Entertainment to Sony Music
  • "on 5 June 2019." → "on 5 June 2019 in various countries."
  • ""29" starts "quiet" and" → "the song starts "quiet" and" as too much usage of the title is bad
  • "parking lot."[9]" → "parking lot".[9]"

Music video

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  • "was uploaded onto Nottet's" → "was uploaded to Nottet's"
  • "with Fanny Sage hired" → "with Fanny Sage being hired"
  • "play Nottet's" → "play the role of Nottet's"
  • "in the passenger seat" → "in the passenger seat of the car"
  • "As they both attempt" → "As they make an attempt"
  • "inside the car as in the clip's" → "inside the car as in the video's"
  • "however he is alone as" → "though he is alone, since"
  • "the song and called it a" → "the song, calling it a"

Charts

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  • Change peak position to being a sortable header

Release history

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  • Territory → Country
  • Give ref own column

References

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  • Change refs 3 and 10 to citing YouTube as publisher instead of via
  • Ref 5 should have iTunes Store as a publisher and cite multiple releases, as otherwise various classifys as WP:USI
  • Ref 12 is dead, remove it and the supported content

Final comments and verdict

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  • Think you could add a reception section though there wasn't many reviews for the song, since a section has potential when they are combined with the chart positions? Anyway, good work but  On hold for now. --Kyle Peake (talk) 04:53, 18 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Kyle Peake:  Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:41, 20 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Pass good job! --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:29, 20 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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