Talk:2021 British Athletics Marathon and 20 km Walk Trial/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:55, 5 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"UK Athletics had considered using the Manchester Marathon as a trial event or holding a trial event near Dorney Lake," - try to avoid using trail event twice in a single sentence
"It was the first dedicated marathon trial event since 1980, as the London Marathon is traditionally used as a qualification event" - repetition of "event"
"Due to the COVID-19 pandemic," - don't think the name of the disease is needed since it is already mentioned at the end of the previous sentence
Who is Richmond Runfest?
"almost 1 mile (1.6 km) in length." - could do with a little rewriting since it is too close to the source verifying this information
"the qualification times were 2:11:30 for the men's race, and 2:29:30 for the women's race." - repetition of "race"

- Done Including as much as I can about Richmond RunFest. They organise running events in Richmond area of London, and can't find much else about them. Joseph2302 (talk) 17:04, 7 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"whose personal best time was under 2:10:00," - set at which event?
"Other competitors included Cameron Corbishley, Daniel King, and Dominic King; Dominic King had set a British record" - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this
"The race also featured Gemma Bridge, Heather Lewis and Erika Kelly," - maybe switch the names of Kelly and Lewis so its in alphaebtical order?
Marathon and 20 km walk should be wikilinked to the relevant articles only on the first
Wikilink the terms 10 km walk to 10 kilometres race walk, 3,000 metres to 3000 metres race walk and 5,000 metres to 5000 metres race walk

"The 20 km walk event commenced at 06:00 UTC, and the marathon event commenced at 08:00 UTC." - repetition of "event"
"His time was 40 seconds inside the qualifying time." - repetition of "time"
"which contained only Connor and Aadan.[8] Aaden finished the race in third;" - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this
Personal best and Jess Piasecki are linked in this section and don't need to be since they are already linked in the section coming before this one
"It was Davis' personal best time, and was inside the Olympic qualifying time by over two minutes." - same point as the second query in this section
"by over two minutes." - more than
"which was 30 seconds outside the qualifying time,[8] but was a personal best time.[14]" - same point as the second query in this section
"he was at pace with the qualifying time, before his pace slowed due to the weather." - Anyway the text in bold can be worded to avoid repetition of the word "pace"

Per WP:DTAB, tables need a caption: add |+ your table caption to the top, or if the caption would duplicate a nearby section header, you can make it |+ your table caption instead so that it only shows up for screen reader software.

Done caption added, don't think it needs to be more descriptive than just saying "men's/women's finishers". Let me know if you disagree. Joseph2302 (talk) 16:04, 6 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

All those references who have authors listed in the original website should be added in
It should be mentioned the two The Daily Telegraph sources shoulds require registration for access
- Done Added authors, and marked The Daily Telegraph as needing subscription (although weirdly, I can access it without registration/subscription). Joseph2302 (talk) 17:15, 7 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Am putting the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 19:03, 5 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

MWright96 I believe that I've resolved all the points mentioned. Please can you have a check and let me know if anything else needs fixing? Joseph2302 (talk) 17:15, 7 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]