Talk:2009 Women's Cricket World Cup final/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sarastro1 (talk · contribs) 20:10, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Another good one. No real problems, and I'm nit-picking a little. My only concern (and I'm not the best one to address this) is how accessible this would be to the non-cricketer. But this is GA, not FAC and I don't see this as a problem here at all. But it may be worth bearing in mind if you take it further. However, I think a few more links would help.

Do we really need to make the point about Australia (traditional rivals, main adversary) twice?

Fair point, removed the second occasion. Harrias ^talk 21:07, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"Patient half-century" is slightly POV; slow or cautious may be better.

Changed to cautious; though I'm not overly convinced that one is any more or less POV than the other. Harrias ^talk 21:07, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"helped to restrict the run chase": Not sure you can restrict a run-chase. A total, yes, but not a chase. Maybe "slowed the run chase"? And should run chase be hyphenated?

Changed to "slowed the run chase." The Daily Telegraph and ESPNcricinfo both use it without hyphens, so I'll stick with that. Harrias ^talk 21:07, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"South Africa fell apart in their chase": a little too journalistic?

Without a doubt. I've changed it to "struggled in their chase". Could do with being a little stronger maybe, but it gets more or less the same point across. Harrias ^talk 21:07, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"led by a century": A hint of sports-speak again.

Cleaned this sentence up. Harrias ^talk 09:44, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"New Zealand set a record second wicket parternership in their final match": A record for who, and in what competition? All ODIs or just WC matches?

Clarified this and added another reference. Harrias ^talk 12:42, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"Shelley Nitschke strangled the run scoring": And again, journalese.

Changed to "slowed". Harrias ^talk 12:42, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"New Zealand collapsed to 101 for 7, during which middle-order batsmen Sara McGlashan and Aimee Mason both got starts": Not sure it sounds quite right, getting starts during a collapse.

How about if I replaced "collapsed" with something like "toiled"? Harrias ^talk 12:42, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Not sure that toiled is an improvement, to be honest. Maybe "Although middle-order batsmen Sara McGlashan and Aimee Mason both got starts, New Zealand collapsed to 101 for 7."? Sarastro1 (talk) 13:16, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

That works, thanks. Harrias ^talk 13:26, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"despite not hitting the ball.[25] Despite their struggles": Despite… despite

Changed one. Harrias ^talk 12:42, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Unless I've missed it, the only mention of Shaw as MoM is in the lead.

Oops! Added to the end of the match summary. Harrias ^talk 13:00, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Maybe some more links: partnership, fours, sixes, mid-on, seam, spin

Added quite a few more. Harrias ^talk 12:42, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Images, links and dablinks all check out fine. Spot-checks reveal no problems.

As usual, a few minor copy-edits, but feel free to revert. I'll put this on hold for the moment, but it's another easy pass. Good stuff. Sarastro1 (talk) 20:31, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I've addressed the first half of the points, will have to come back to the second half. Cheers for the review. Harrias ^talk 21:07, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Last minor point to sort, then I'll pass. Sarastro1 (talk) 13:17, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]