Talk:1983 British Airways Helicopters Sikorsky S-61 crash/GA2

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 23:06, 16 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Lead - " in the Atlantic Ocean, when en route" - Should this be "while en route"?

Yup, changed. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"when the Boeing 234LR Chinook" - "When a Boeing ..."? The current wording implies that there was only one Boeing 234LR Chinook. (Unless, of course, 234LR is a callsign, in which case the is correct).

Sort of; you are cutting it off too early: "the Boeing 234LR Chinook helicopter G-BWFC" is the one helicopter in question. It's just the same as saying "the politician Bernie Sanders". Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox - What does ... next to the injuries signify?

Never in the whole time that I have worked on this article have I noticed that. Removed it. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Background - Wikilink certificate of airworthiness.

Done. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Flight - "The actual visibility recorded at St Mary's aerodrome" - Should aerodrome be capitalized here, like previously?

Capitalised for consistency. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"that Delta Alpha had landed, and flown the entire journey according " - Is this comma necessary?

Removed. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"and as they passed by Longships Lighthouse ... hey recorded visibility" - The subject is the helicopter. Either the crew or something along those lines needs to be inserted to become the subject, or a change to it is probably in order.

Reworded. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Rescue - The lifeboat's a redlink. Is it likely that this thing will pass GNG? If not, maybe the links should be removed.

Yeah, probably not. Delinked both. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Wikilink MP, this isn't particularly obvious from a non-UK perspective.

Linked on first use. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Recovery Should Falmouth be wikilinked? Not everyone's gonna now where Falmouth is in relation to the accident (I don't, at least).

Yes, linked. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Investigation - Parliament should be capitalized, right?

Yes, linked. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

You talk about Hughes, the Labour MP, should the Labour Party be wikilinked to? Sort of like in the US referring to so-and-so, a Republican congressman?

Yes, linked. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"involving Sikorsky S-61" - Is this quite right? My instincts say either making Sikorsky S-61 plural, or stating "the Sikorsky S-61". I might be wrong, though.

Yes, added "the". Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Would it be off-topic to state if the pilot, Lawlor, lost his pilot's license or not?

There's nothing verifiable that says one way or the other. He flies now, but I can't tell you for sure if he continued flying throughout, or had to stop and redo a course, or anything like that. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Does the definition of ditching in the notes need a citation?

It is essentially just a convenience note; it is a non-controversial factual definition, I don't think a citation is necessary. I could add one easily enough if you disagree. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The refs all look reliable, and the fair-use rationale on the retrieval picture is proper.

That's it, pinging nominator, Harrias. Hog Farm (talk) 21:25, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hog Farm: Thanks for the review; I have responded to each point above. Harrias ^talk 22:17, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Harrias: - All concerns satisfactorily addressed, passing for GA status. (I'm fine with the ditching definition being considered uncontroversial, a FA review might flag that, though). Hog Farm (talk) 22:20, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]