Talk:1929 World Snooker Championship/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:13, 14 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"the BACC decided to abandon the challenge system that had been used for both the Billiards Championship and for the Professional Snooker Championship." - employed for both the Billiards Championship and the Professional Snooker Championship.
Wikilink the term frame to the relevant article only on the first mention
"For matches before the final," - how about For pre-final matches, instead?

"Lawrence and Mann had to play a first round match, the winner to meet Davis." - with the winner

"over six days than the three envisaged when the tournament's conditions were announced." - why was this the case?

Amended. The source has a note "(evening sessions only being played, so that the game occupied six days instead of three)" but no reason as to why the change was made. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:47, 14 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"Mann when attempting to pot the yellow instead of playing for a snoooker in the deciding frame lost him the match." - the word in bold contains a spelling error

"maintaining a four-frame advantage at 9–7 after two days." - shouldn't that be two-frame

"The final was played from 4 March to 7 March and was over 33 frames." - The 33-frame final was played from 4 to 7 March.
The term frame can be wikilinked to the relevant article only on the first mention
Wikilink foul stroke to the relevant article for non-Snooker readers
"Dennis won the 15th frame by six points, after clearing the last three colours, and added the 16th frame, during which he escaped from a snooker with a massé shot, and potted the pink after Davis had gone in-off." - run-on sentence
"Davis lost the first frame by one point, 56-57," - hyphen should be replaced by an en dash per MOS:DASH
"and the over break of over 50 made during the tournament." - repetition of "over"

A table header will need to be added to the table which needs to be fully referenced

I believe References 3, 12, 13, 14, 16, 18, 19, 21, 22, 25, 26 and all the BNA ones in page 30 need their page numbers included

Am placing the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 14:44, 14 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for your constructive review comments, MWright96. Let me know if anything else is needed. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:11, 14 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- @BennyOnTheLoose: Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 17:44, 14 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]